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Tensai1031 Posted 14 years ago
Grammar
I wrote the following sentences in academic style. Please help me check them. Thanks a lot.
1. The company is still able to keep the director working for it in a long time by offering attractive incentives instead of high salary increases; for example providing them with houses, or cars and another material possessions.
2. The director will seldom be willing to leave the company if they are led to beleive that they can have good career prospects in long run or if they are given a few shares of the company.
2. The director will seldom be willing to leave the company if they are led to beleive that they can have good career prospects in long run or if they are given a few shares of the company.
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I think you should concentrate less on 'academic style' and more on the mot juste. 1. The company is still able to employ the directo r for an extended period by offering attractive incentives instead of large salary increase s, for example providing them with accommodation, transportation and another advantages.
- I think you should concentrate less on 'academic style' and more on the mot juste.
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- The company is still able to employ the directo r for an extended period by offering attractive incentives instead of large salary increase s, for example providing them with accommodation, transportation and another advantages.
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- The director will seldom be tempted to leave the company if s he is l ed to believe that s he has good career prospects with it in the long run or if she is offered shares in the company.
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I think you should concentrate less on 'academic style' and more on the mot juste.
1. The company is still able to employ the director for an extended period by offering attractive incentives instead of large salary increases, for example providing them with accommodation, transportation and another advantages.
2. The director will
1. The company is still able to employ the director for an extended period by offering attractive incentives instead of large salary increases, for example providing them with accommodation, transportation and another advantages.
2. The director will
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Thank your advice so much. Maybe it is suitable for me at the moment.
Can you give me some adivces to improve my using of the mot juste.
And besides that, I do not understand why you use the pronoun "she" instead of " they". ^^
Can you give me some adivces to improve my using of the mot juste.
And besides that, I do not understand why you use the pronoun "she" instead of " they". ^^
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tensai1031, I do not understand why you use the pronoun "she" instead of " they"Because in your sentence, the noun referent is singular 'the director', and I chose the feminine singular pronoun out of political correctness instead of 'he' for a change.
tensai1031Can you give me some adivces to improve my using of the mot juste.
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