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Nick212 Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
I writed a essay anyone can revise it ?
There r must be lot of mistake ,anyone can help me ?
My colleagues were talking about go to swimming recently.some guys said :" i want to do some exercise, i want to lost some weight ."Actually , i do not buy that.i thought they all want to see some pretty bikini girls .So we decide to swim at the vacation of 5.1 .
it's not much time left ,we need get the stuff ready.so i went to shop to buy the bathing trunks yesterday.i have not think about the price of bathing trunks before.I thought it' must be 10 yuan or 30yuan at top.
So i went in the shop and pick up a nice looking bathing trunks and tell the salers:"OK give me this one." the saler said :" ok it's 138yuan ." I was a bit surprised :" what ?? a bathing trunks need 138yuan ??"then the saler said a lot of good of this bathing trunks,i was not listenning.i pick up the bathing trunks and talk to my friend:" is this bathing trunks good ? and fitness ? is it a little big for me?" I was hoping that he can know my mind and tell me that this bathing trunks is too big for me or it's not fit me ,so that i can tell the saler i do not want it ,i do not buy it.But unfortunately he said :" OH it's good and so sexy for u ." it's fucking bullshit .
finally i bought this 138yuan bathing trunks.The saler also said to me did u need some other stuff?I reply she quickly :" no no need just the bathing trunks ."
My colleagues were talking about go to swimming recently.some guys said :" i want to do some exercise, i want to lost some weight ."Actually , i do not buy that.i thought they all want to see some pretty bikini girls .So we decide to swim at the vacation of 5.1 .
it's not much time left ,we need get the stuff ready.so i went to shop to buy the bathing trunks yesterday.i have not think about the price of bathing trunks before.I thought it' must be 10 yuan or 30yuan at top.
So i went in the shop and pick up a nice looking bathing trunks and tell the salers:"OK give me this one." the saler said :" ok it's 138yuan ." I was a bit surprised :" what ?? a bathing trunks need 138yuan ??"then the saler said a lot of good of this bathing trunks,i was not listenning.i pick up the bathing trunks and talk to my friend:" is this bathing trunks good ? and fitness ? is it a little big for me?" I was hoping that he can know my mind and tell me that this bathing trunks is too big for me or it's not fit me ,so that i can tell the saler i do not want it ,i do not buy it.But unfortunately he said :" OH it's good and so sexy for u ." it's fucking bullshit .
finally i bought this 138yuan bathing trunks.The saler also said to me did u need some other stuff?I reply she quickly :" no no need just the bathing trunks ."
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Hi,
why ther is no replies Probably because you have a lot of mistakes, and so far nobody feels like spending their time to correct it all.
I will correct the first paragraph.
My colleagues were talking about going swimming recently. Some of them said: " I want to do some exercise. I want to lost some weight ." Actually, I did not buy that.
why ther is no replies Probably because you have a lot of mistakes, and so far nobody feels like spending their time to correct it all.
I will correct the first paragraph.
My colleagues were talking about going swimming recently. Some of them said: " I want to do some exercise. I want to lost some weight ." Actually, I did not buy that.
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