I would like someone to proofread my essay, pls

Dear friends,

Professional project is required for the MBA admission.
I really would like somebody to proofread and freely suggest my essay.
I know that it's weak in some points but it's obscure for me so I need others' pt of view.
Thank you for your assistance.

Pam

Professional Project

Two years ago, I gained considerable and real-world knowledge from the marketing research project conducted in class. And that, I discovered my latent enthusiasm and was determined to pursue academically and professionally in the marketing field. Marketing expertise seems ordinary yet powerful and tempting to examine further and deeply. I am highly motivated to be a professional business woman taking initiatives to market products successfully at a global level. After sufficient knowledge application and experience, I have a strong passion to accomplish the doctorate degree in international marketing ,and to contribute to a waiting community by being a teacher at *** which I graduated from. I am positive that I will be influential to students to follow their motivation, just like my professor did.

YYY offers the right and matched education opportunity for me as followings;

Being highly flexible and tailored, the course structure allows me to mold and envisage my future plan.

Students are oblidged to complete 18 months of validated professional experience. Almost 2 years as Administrative Director BBBB, I figure out that study and work can be considered different matters. However, I can blend two together and be capable of employing knowledge from class for functioning business operations at my best since I regularly review chapters in textbooks and practice them.
Validated professional experience, from my viewpoint, empowers knowledge application in strengthening conceptual ideas.

With innovative teaching methods and being the most professionally-oriented business school (ZZZ, November 2003), YYY teaches students to manage successfully challenges exposed by globalization and high cultural diversity.

School provides several international exposures in which I am eager to participate in and well aware that these programs such as a wide range of exchange program, the AAA MBA and Internship abroad will benefit me in terms of cultural learning and adaptation. Successful managers are capable of understanding subtle cultural differences among people.

Accredited from CCCC International and DDDD and containing faculty with highly appreciated profiles, YYY delivers its best to students through refined professors and programs.

MBA YYY is my priority since the school passes its academic and professional excellency on its prospects. Eventhough I am not extraordinary either academically and professionally, I am confident that I will be coming with the strongest motivation and determination to participate in MBA Program. I realize that competition is stiff and study requires efforts and great contribution but I am not afriad to try since ability to overcome hardship means priceless experience for me.