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A glance at the provided line graph reveals a similar trend of using the Internet in the US, Canada, and Mexico from 1999 to 2009. Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of people in three countries, who had access to the Internet, rose in a period of 10 years. Nevertheless, the percentage of American and Canadian cyber citizens is much higher than Mexicans, and Canada welcomed the fastest growth in Internet usage.

In 1999, the number of internet surfers in the US accounted for 20%. Meanwhile, the percentage of web users in Canada and Mexico is lower, at about 10% and 5%, respectively. Internet usage in both America and

Canada jumped significantly to somewhere in the vicinity of 70% population, while the figure for Mexico reached just over 25% in 2005.

By 2009, the proportion of netizens was highest in Canada, with almost 100% population using the Internet. However, American users increased only 10%, from 70% in 2005 to 80% in 2009. And just 40% of people in Mexico were using the Internet at that time.