I will try to provide you with a Flickr URL for the picture I send you.

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Please make corrections/edits to the following text:

You haven't responded to any of my emails for last couple of days. I hope everything is good on your end. Perhaps you are having winter vacation.

...Next time I will try to provide you with a Flickr URL for the picture I send you. I believe this will make easy for you to reply. But still I will keep forwarding you the pictures along with the emails because it will make easy for me to review those emails later. But, of course, you will be able to access the picture under discussion by using Flickr URL.

Hoa Thai · Accepted Answer

Hi Jackson,

Look at the underlined parts and my comments provided below.

You haven't responded to any of my emails for last couple of days. I hope everything is good on your end. Perhaps you are having winter vacation.

...Next time I will try to provide you with a Flickr URL for the picture I send you. I believe this will make easy for you to reply. But still, I will keep forwarding you the pictures along with the emails because it will make easy for me to review those emails later. But, of course, you will be able to access the pictures under discussion by using Flickr URL.

1. ‘last’ needs 'the'.

2. ‘Next time’: Do you associate ‘next time’ with ‘next email’? I do not think the phrase add much meaning to the sentence.

3. ‘the picture’ should be ‘the pictures’ for consistency. BTW, do you mean ‘the pictures’ that you send along with this email?

4. ‘this’: What does 'this' stand for? this email / this act of providing the URL?

5. ‘But still’ is redundant.

6. ‘forwarding’ should be 'sending' unless you mean you received the pictures from different sources and now pass them to your friend / associate. If you prefer to use ‘forwarding’, I would suggest that you replace ‘forwarding you’ with ‘forwarding to you’.

7. ‘the pictures’: what pictures? The same pictures that you now send?

8. ‘But, of course’: If the last sentence augments / compliments the previous passage, the usage of ‘but’ might not be applicable. ‘Of course’ should be enough. BTW, do you really need to add the last sentence? I think you conveyed your idea of using the Flickr URL previously.

9. ‘under discussion’: discussion needs exchange of ideas between two or more parties.
Best wishes,
Hoa Thai

I will try to provide you with a Flickr URL for the picture I send you.

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