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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
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My interest in Computers started during my High
School years though my father wanted me to become a medical doctor.After i graduated, i realised that i did not want to become a medical doctor.The profession did not interest me.One Wednesday, i logged in to an online investement account i had, and i saw that the website has
been hacked. I wasn't sad i had lost my money.Instead,it sparked my interest.I wanted to know how these hackers operate and then learn how to stop them.Computer Science was a career choice after this.
I have spent a lot of time looking for information on search-engines, the outline of the course - Computer Science and Information Technology.I am especially interested in gaining a deeper theoretical and practical knowledge in Computer Science and Information Technology.A completion of this Bachelor's degree at the University of lodz will be an excellent springboard for my future career and will provide me the knowledge and
confidence to realise my dreams.Furthermore, the courses this program combines match perfectly my acadmeic expectations.
Over the years,i have worked mostly in small companies where i was not just the admin but also technology whiz.while i was at JOTT limited as an admin,i offered exceptional attention to details, and was able to manage and organize the office effectively with a demostrated ability to prioritize and multitask.I also gained valuable
experience working as a Computer studies teacher in Tiddler royal school.After working for some years in the school, i decided to write a program that will access a database that contain the names of the pupils.Though it was a small program,working on this project helped hone
my programming skills on real-life problem.I also have a very good knowledge of Microsoft Office
applications,programming in C++ and a host of others.
In addition to my computing skills, i have an aptitude for teaching and teamwork, a zest for challenges and maintain a mature, gracious and professional manner when communicating with people. I believe in my ability to bring a sense of purpose with me into any setting, my perchant for hard work is second to none.
I wish to earn a Bsc degree in Computer Science, i intend to follow this up with a Msc degree in Information Technology, and later, a career in Cyber Security.I am confident that my background and knowledge in the Information technology arena coupled with my technical
skill in software languages will help achieve my goal of undertaking cutting-edge research in advanced computing at the University of lodz.
I have all it takes to succeed, sharpen my knowledge to becoming a well-rounded and polished person both in education and life.I therefore would like to take with me,in addition to knowledge of Computer Science, a network of strong and lasting relationships with my teachers and fellow-students. I also look forward to experiencing the different foods, lifestyle and culture of the people of Poland.
In the meantime, thank you for any time and effort you take in reviewing my application.
Sincerely.
My interest in Computers started during my High
School years though my father wanted me to become a medical doctor.After i graduated, i realised that i did not want to become a medical doctor.The profession did not interest me.One Wednesday, i logged in to an online investement account i had, and i saw that the website has
been hacked. I wasn't sad i had lost my money.Instead,it sparked my interest.I wanted to know how these hackers operate and then learn how to stop them.Computer Science was a career choice after this.
I have spent a lot of time looking for information on search-engines, the outline of the course - Computer Science and Information Technology.I am especially interested in gaining a deeper theoretical and practical knowledge in Computer Science and Information Technology.A completion of this Bachelor's degree at the University of lodz will be an excellent springboard for my future career and will provide me the knowledge and
confidence to realise my dreams.Furthermore, the courses this program combines match perfectly my acadmeic expectations.
Over the years,i have worked mostly in small companies where i was not just the admin but also technology whiz.while i was at JOTT limited as an admin,i offered exceptional attention to details, and was able to manage and organize the office effectively with a demostrated ability to prioritize and multitask.I also gained valuable
experience working as a Computer studies teacher in Tiddler royal school.After working for some years in the school, i decided to write a program that will access a database that contain the names of the pupils.Though it was a small program,working on this project helped hone
my programming skills on real-life problem.I also have a very good knowledge of Microsoft Office
applications,programming in C++ and a host of others.
In addition to my computing skills, i have an aptitude for teaching and teamwork, a zest for challenges and maintain a mature, gracious and professional manner when communicating with people. I believe in my ability to bring a sense of purpose with me into any setting, my perchant for hard work is second to none.
I wish to earn a Bsc degree in Computer Science, i intend to follow this up with a Msc degree in Information Technology, and later, a career in Cyber Security.I am confident that my background and knowledge in the Information technology arena coupled with my technical
skill in software languages will help achieve my goal of undertaking cutting-edge research in advanced computing at the University of lodz.
I have all it takes to succeed, sharpen my knowledge to becoming a well-rounded and polished person both in education and life.I therefore would like to take with me,in addition to knowledge of Computer Science, a network of strong and lasting relationships with my teachers and fellow-students. I also look forward to experiencing the different foods, lifestyle and culture of the people of Poland.
In the meantime, thank you for any time and effort you take in reviewing my application.
Sincerely.
Top answer
Did anyone ever tell you that i is incorrect? Perhaps not, since you use it a lot! So delete every i and replace it with I.
- Did anyone ever tell you that i is incorrect?
- Perhaps not, since you use it a lot!
- So delete every i and replace it with I.
- I have highlighted other errors in the first paragraphs.
- If you make corrections, and re-post, I will check more of it.
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Did anyone ever tell you that i is incorrect? Perhaps not, since you use it a lot! So delete every i and replace it with I.
I have highlighted other errors in the first paragraphs. If you make corrections, and re-post, I will check more of it.
My interest in
I have highlighted other errors in the first paragraphs. If you make corrections, and re-post, I will check more of it.
My interest in
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