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Angliholic Posted 17 years ago
Grammar
I want to watch movie
Amy : I want to watch movie.
Mom : OK.
Amy : You accompany me to go.
Mom : Why? You can go with your friend. I am busy.
Amy : All they will take their boyfriend or girlfriend.I don't want to become a electric bulb!
Mom : eh...ok.You ask Eve.Parker and your dad want to watch movie together.
Amy : wow! That's great.
Hi,
A friend of mine wrote the above to practice her English writing. I try to help her by rewrite it as the following. I want to improve her writing by giving her the right version. So, please correct me if I am wrong. Thanks.
Amy: I want to go to see a movie!
Mom: OK.
Amy: Will you come along with me?
Mom: Why? You can go with your friends. I am way way busy!
Amy: All of my friends will take their dates. I don't want to be the third wheel!
Mom: Eh ... then, ask your sister(Eve), your brother(Parker), and Dad to go with you?
Amy: Wow! That's great!!!
Mom : OK.
Amy : You accompany me to go.
Mom : Why? You can go with your friend. I am busy.
Amy : All they will take their boyfriend or girlfriend.I don't want to become a electric bulb!
Mom : eh...ok.You ask Eve.Parker and your dad want to watch movie together.
Amy : wow! That's great.
Hi,
A friend of mine wrote the above to practice her English writing. I try to help her by rewrite it as the following. I want to improve her writing by giving her the right version. So, please correct me if I am wrong. Thanks.
Amy: I want to go to see a movie!
Mom: OK.
Amy: Will you come along with me?
Mom: Why? You can go with your friends. I am way way busy!
Amy: All of my friends will take their dates. I don't want to be the third wheel!
Mom: Eh ... then, ask your sister(Eve), your brother(Parker), and Dad to go with you?
Amy: Wow! That's great!!!
Top answer
Good rewrite! A few comments. 1.
- Good rewrite!
- A few comments.
- 1.
- go and see a movie!
- (more conversational) 2.
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Good rewrite!
A few comments.
1. ... go and see a movie! (more conversational)
2. There's no need to add way way to I'm busy. For emphasis, I'm very busy is enough, and even that is not necessary.
3. I don't want to be a third wheel.
4. ... or Dad to go with you. (no question mark) (I
A few comments.
1. ... go and see a movie! (more conversational)
2. There's no need to add way way to I'm busy. For emphasis, I'm very busy is enough, and even that is not necessary.
3. I don't want to be a third wheel.
4. ... or Dad to go with you. (no question mark) (I
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