I want to complete describing the first bar chart and then i know how to write the second bar chart.thank you so much

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The first bar chart is clear that the main reasons for study among students are directly proportional to their age . Overall,a much larger percentage of students under 26 studied for career in comparison with students over 49 who studied mostly for interest.

Looking at the first bar chart,you can see the percentage of students under 26 who studied for career is highest with 80%.On the contrary,students of the same age who studied for interest was lowest with 10%.Besides,you can realize changes obviously at the students over 49 . A number of students who studied for career plummet to approximately 20% whereas a number of students studying for interest shot up about 70% .

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AlpheccaStars · Answer

You have many spacing errors. You must put a space after a punctuation mark.

You need an opening paragraph to describe the parameters of the figures given.

Model Paragraph #1.
The first of two bar charts presents two reasons for study (for career, and for interest) for five different age groups. The age groups are: under 26, 26-29, 30-39, 40-49 an over 49. The units of measure are percentage.
The second bar chart...

The first bar chart shows ~~is clear~~ ("clear", "obvious" and "evident" are opinion words. Do not write opinions in Task 1. That is for Task 2.) that the main reasons for study among students are directly proportional (incorrect mathematical expression - you need the mathematical term "correlation / correlated") to their age . Overall,a much larger percentage of students under 26 studied for career in comparison with students over 49 who studied mostly for interest.

~~Looking at the first bar chart,you can see~~ the percentage of students under 26 who studied for career is highest (You repeated the same information. Avoid repetition.) with 80%.On the contrary,students of the same age who studied for interest was lowest with 10%.Besides,you can realize changes (That is an opinion. Just describe the data. Don't write opinions or conclusions.) obviously at the students over 49 . A number (wrong word) of students who studied for career plummet (You need to use objective, neutral and dispassionate language. Terms like "plummet", "rocket" and "shoot up" are emotive. They are not appropriate when writing for a math or science professor.) to approximately 20% whereas a number of students studying for interest shot up (Not mathematical terminology.) about 70% .

The second paragraph should give 2-3 main observations about the data. For example, here are two observations for chart #1:

1. The values in the two categories add up to a total of between 80 and 90%; there is no information from 10-20% of these students.

2. The percentage who study for interest is strongly correlated with their age; the older the student, the more likely they are to be studying for interest rather than for their career. The inverse is true for the reason of studying for career.

I want to complete describing the first bar chart and then i know how to write the second bar chart.thank you so much

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