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Willzmj Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
I think there are some grammar problems in this long sentence
The reason of the popularity of shark fin are related to Chinese
culture of keep the health that Chinese medicine thought that the shark fin is good for breathing and health, stimulating the appetite,
while modern gourmets suggested that it has rich collagen , preventing
and curing cancer,preventing skeleton from aging, nourishing the skin and extending the lifespan.
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culture of keep the health that Chinese medicine thought that the shark fin is good for breathing and health, stimulating the appetite,
while modern gourmets suggested that it has rich collagen , preventing
and curing cancer,preventing skeleton from aging, nourishing the skin and extending the lifespan.
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Top answer
Hi, You have a number of problems. One reason is that you have tried to write such a long sentence. I suggest that you change this long sentence into two or more shorter ones, and then post those.
- Hi, You have a number of problems.
- One reason is that you have tried to write such a long sentence.
- I suggest that you change this long sentence into two or more shorter ones, and then post those.
- Clive
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Hi,
You have a number of problems. One reason is that you have tried to write such a long sentence.
I suggest that you change this long sentence into two or more shorter ones, and then post those.
Clive
You have a number of problems. One reason is that you have tried to write such a long sentence.
I suggest that you change this long sentence into two or more shorter ones, and then post those.
Clive
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The popular of shark fin because of Chinese culture of health. Chinese
medicine think that the shark fin is good for breathing and health and
it can stimulate the appetite. While modern gourmets suggest that it
has rich collagen,and can prevent and cure cancer and skeleton aging,
nourish the skin and extend the lifespan.
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medicine think that the shark fin is good for breathing and health and
it can stimulate the appetite. While modern gourmets suggest that it
has rich collagen,and can prevent and cure cancer and skeleton aging,
nourish the skin and extend the lifespan.
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willzmjThe reason of the popularity of shark fin areare-->is
you have to use a gerund after "of" so keep-->keeping.
i think there are many mistakes.
Correct(in my own way)
The reason of the popularity of shark fin is related to Chinese
culture of keeping healthy.Chinese thought that the shark fin is good for breathing system and
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Hi,
I've tried to keep your words as much as possible.
The popularity of shark fin is because of the Chinese culture of health. Chinese
medicine thinks that shark fin is good for breathing and health, and that
it can stimulate the appetite. Modern gourmets suggest that it
has rich collagen, can prevent and cure cancer and skeleton aging,
I've tried to keep your words as much as possible.
The popularity of shark fin is because of the Chinese culture of health. Chinese
medicine thinks that shark fin is good for breathing and health, and that
it can stimulate the appetite. Modern gourmets suggest that it
has rich collagen, can prevent and cure cancer and skeleton aging,
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