I survived after an accident on Hai Van pass

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Yesterday, I and my friend went to Hue city by motobike . We begun at Da Nang city at 9.30 am and arrived Hue city at 12 am. We come back Da nang at 4 pm. When we cam Hai Van pass , we had an accident , my nose was hurt, blood in my nose flow out ... I was afraid , I was a fraid I would died because I graduated and I have not found job yet.

I am in library now , I am learning english very hard . All interview need english level very high . I feel English very important for me and I decide come back Da Nang for learning English. I pray My mother and father always strong . I will find job soon and help them

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

Yesterday, I and my friend went to Hue by motorbike . We leftt Da Nang at 9.30 am and arrived in Hue city at noon. We come back to Da Nang at 4 pm. When we reached Hai Van pass , we had an accident. I hurt my nose, and it was bleeding ... I was afraid, I was afraid that I would die before I graduated, and before I found a job.

I am in the library now, and I am studying English very hard. All job interviews require a very high level of English level. I feel English is very important for me, and I have decided to come back Da Nang to learn it. I pray that my mother and father will always be healthy. I will find a job soon and help them.

Post again if you need any more help. Next time, it would be friendly if you added something to your post like 'Hi, can someone please correct this for me?'

Best wishes, Clive

Goodman · Answer

Quangtrungvtv
Yesterday, I and my friend went to Hue city by motobike . We begun at Da Nang city at 9.30 am and arrived Hue city at 12 am. We come back Da nang at 4 pm. When we cam Hai Van pass , we had an accident , my nose was hurt, blood in my nose flow out ... I was afraid , I was a fraid I would died because I graduated and I have not found job yet.

I am in library now , I am learning english very hard . All interview need english level very high . I feel English very important for me and I decide come back Da Nang for learning English. I pray My mother and father always strong . I will find job soon and help them

Hi Quangtrungvtv,

I took a little time to go over your post. I hope yo don't mind my being straightforward. I revised it for your reference.

My friend and I went to Hue city on motorcyle yesterday. We left Da Nang City at 9:30 in the morning, arriving Hue at noon. [ perhaps to should talk about what you did at Hue]

Because of the two and half hour ride home, we began the return trip at 4 pm. Everything on the return ride went smoothly until we came to Hai Van Pass. [How did the accident happen?] At that moment, I was very scared of death. I didn't want to die because I just have graduated from college, and not found a job yet. Luckliy, we weren't badly injured and only suffered from a ****** nose and some scrapes and bruises.

I am all better now and I am spending more time studying English at the library harder than ever before. I realize English is very important to my future because all job interviews are conducted in English, and I haven't found a job yet. I pray for my parents to stay healthy and strong so that I can repay them for everything they give me by giving them a better life when I find a good job.

Quangtrungvtv · Answer

Thanks very much. My level have not written like this yet. I will always try.

Philip · Answer

I think it would be more idiomatic to title your post "I survived an accident", eliminating 'after'.

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