I need your help to revise my cover letter

Dear All,

I would like to apply a job which relating to research position and I am doing my master degree .

Please help me edit this letter about following as detail below .

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to apply for Marketing Research Executive position in response to your advertisement in ABC.com. I graduated from UBC University and hold a bachelors degree from the faculty of Economics and Business Administration, with a major in Business Economics. I then challenged myself with my own Chainess Food business. This gave me a great opportunity to learn how to operate a real business as an entrepreneurial owner, including marketing and sales, problem solving and dealing with department stores.




























































In addition, I was employed as a credit and marketing officer in BBC Bank. I was responsible for credit analysis in both consumer and commercial finance, credit proposals,worked in loan collections and maintained relationships with customers.


More over I have strong interest in marketing field especially CRM and I am currently doing master degree in Business Economics which concentrate on marketing as well as I am expected I would finish in next semester and also my research regarding to network - provider. businessI believe that my experience, analytical skills and understanding of research methodology these qualities would make me a excellent candidate.


My resume is attached. An opportunity to discuss my abilities and skills and how I can help your company would be most welcome. I appreciate y

Yours faithfully,








BB T.k



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