I need your help to edit my cover letter for job application

Dear All,

Could you please revise my cover letter for job application in marketing position but I did not finish directly in marketing,how can I write a good letter for this.

The detail as below.

111 Khonsan Road
Banglumpu, Bangkok

1 January, 2010


Human Resources Department
BB Public Company Limited
100 Sukhumvit Rd., Bangkok


Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to apply for the marketing Officer position in response to your advertisement in Jobjob.com

I graduated from Taxusssss University and hold a bachelors degree from the faculty of Economics, with a major in Business Economics. I then challenged myself with my own chiness Food business. This gave me a great opportunity to learn how to operate a real business as an entrepreneurial owner, including marketing and sales, problem solving and dealing with department stores.


In addition, I was employed as a customer service representative in National Bank Group. I was responsible for credit analysis in both consumer and commercial finance, credit proposals, worked in loan collections and maintained relationships with customers.



Besides,I have strong interest in marketing field especially Branding, CRM and also I have ability to conduct marketing plan as well as I also do a part time job as mystery shoper, my job are to evaluate sales productknowledge and shelve life cycle.I believe that my experience, analytical skill and creative thinking along with my understanding of consumer finance business would make me a excellent candidate.




My resume is attached. An opportunity to discuss my abilities and skills and how I can help your company would be most welcome. I appreciate your consideration and look forward to meeting you.


Yours faithfully,

Ana Abdula