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I need your help to correctI need a bright room with lots of natural lighting for the photo shoot. The lighting depends on the floor the room is on and the situation of the room, by that I mean what it is overlooking and whether it is overlook the south north east or west.xxx

Doctor D · Accepted Answer

I would simplify and change a few words:

I need a bright room with lots of natural lighting for the photo shoot. So I need to know the floor the room is on and the orientation of the room. By that I mean whether it is facing south, north, east, or west.

Does this help?

Anonymous · Answer

Very nice

Can I add : and what it overlooks?

For the same email is this correct?
I used the hotel as a landmark to help me find my way. I knew I had to go in the opposite direction of the hotel.

This help very much
Have a nice evening

Anonymous · Answer

This is the whole of it.
I used the hotel as a landmark to help me find my way. I knew I had to go in the opposite direction of the hotel. If there was one area in the city where there should be a billboard with a map of the district for people to look at to get around, it definitely should be here. I've gotten lost many times in this area.

What do you think?

Doctor D · Answer

Let me answer your first question and return to the other in another post.

Yes, you can add "what it overlooks" to the sentence. I left it out because I was not sure what you wanted to say.
I would, however, put it in the middle, because the following sentence talks about what you mean by "orientation of the room." You want the explanation to immediately follow the term. So the whole sentence would be

"So I need to know the floor the room is on, what it overlooks, and the orientation of the room.

Doctor D · Answer

My suggestions on your full paragraph:
I used the hotel as a landmark to help me find my way. I knew I had to go in the opposite direction of the hotel. If there was one area in the city where there should be a billboard with a map of the district for people to look at to get around, it definitely should be here. I've gotten lost many times in this area.

The grammar is okay. (The third sentence is a bit long, but it would be hard to shorten.) However the sense of your second sentence ("I knew I had to go in the opposite direction of the hotel") is unclear. First, you had to go in the opposite direction to do what? Second, the hotel is not on a line in one direction (and its opposite). You need to clarify. For example: "To get to the park, I knew I had to go away from the hotel toward the east." See my point?

Anonymous · Answer

Is the term use landmark correct? I added 'and east' What do you think about 'in the opposite direction of/to the hotel?
Is the 3rd sentence how you would say it?
I used the hotel as a landmark to help me find my way. I knew I had to go in the opposite direction of the hotel and east. If there was one area in the city where there should be a billboard with a map of the district for people to look at to get around, it definitely should be here. I've gotten lost many times in this area.

The answers are below, Is it possible for you to tell me what you think of the corrections?

1)
I know, had I come to visit the city in the winter I wouldn't have appreciated it the same way.
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Should I say during the winter or in the winter? appreciate it the same way or like it the same way. How would you have put it?

2)
I'd rather freeze my face off than freeze my neck off because if I wear my scarf over my face and not my neck, there is a better chance I will get sick.
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How would you write the sentence if you had to say something like it?

3)
Let's go inside to warm up a bit. I'm feeling cold out in the snow. Fine.
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Does heat up work better or not?

4)
Would you rather live in a country where you'd be so cold as not to feel your face or in a country where you'd be so hot as not to be able to breathe?
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If this is clumsy, how would you say it unclumsily?

5)
I pay the monthly salary of one employee with the money from renting a hotel room for one night
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Is this good English?

6)
The tram in this city doesn't have its own lane. It follows the lane of the cars.
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I understand it but is it the best choice of words?

1) All 4 are fine.
2) It is OK as it is.
3) No; use 'warm up'.
4) Would you rather live in a country that's so cold you can't feel your face or in a country that's so hot you can't breathe?
5) Yes, but the meaning is obscure.
6) Use 'car lane'.

Regards and thank you for your time

Doctor D · Answer

My suggestions follow [in bold]:

Is the term use landmark correct? I added 'and east' What do you think about 'in the opposite direction of/to the hotel?
Is the 3rd sentence how you would say it?
I used the hotel as a landmark to help me find my way. I knew I had to go in the opposite direction of the hotel and east. If there was one area in the city where there should be a billboard with a map of the district for people to look at to get around, it definitely should be here. I've gotten lost many times in this area.

["Landmark" is fine.
I wouldn't say "in the opposite direction of/to the hotel." I would say "away from the hotel toward the east." If you are fixed on "opposite direction," I would say "I knew I had to go easterly in a direction opposite to that of the hotel."
Third sentence. You could say it your way, but I would shorten it up and use one tense throughout: "If there is one area of the city where people need a billboard with a map of the district, it definitely is here."]
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The answers are below, Is it possible for you to tell me what you think of the corrections?

1) I know, had I come to visit the city in the winter I wouldn't have appreciated it the same way.
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Should I say during the winter or in the winter? appreciate it the same way or like it the same way. How would you have put it?

2) I'd rather freeze my face off than freeze my neck off because if I wear my scarf over my face and not my neck, there is a better chance I will get sick.
----
How would you write the sentence if you had to say something like it?

3) Let's go inside to warm up a bit. I'm feeling cold out in the snow. Fine.
----
Does heat up work better or not?

4) Would you rather live in a country where you'd be so cold as not to feel your face or in a country where you'd be so hot as not to be able to breathe?
----
If this is clumsy, how would you say it ~~unclumsily~~? [smoothly]

5) I pay the monthly salary of one employee with the money from renting a hotel room for one night
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Is this good English?

6) The tram in this city doesn't have its own lane. It follows the lane of the cars.
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I understand it but is it the best choice of words?
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Here are my comments on the corrections:
1) All 4 are fine.
[Maybe: "During the winter" and "in the winter" are equally good. But "appreciate" and "like" do not mean the same. I think "appreciate" is the more exact word.]

2) It is OK as it is.
[It is okay but could be improved by shortening and by rewording the middle:
I'd rather freeze my face than my neck because if I cover my face with a scarf instead of my neck, there is a better chance I will get sick.]

3) No; use 'warm up'. [Correct-~~the next step up from cold is warm, not hot. Also, people warm up from being cold; they heat up from exercise~~-meaning, they get hotter than they want to be.]

4) Would you rather live in a country that's so cold you can't feel your face or in a country that's so hot you can't breathe? [Yes, a good version.]

5) Yes, but the meaning is obscure. [I would give more information: I can pay the monthly salary of one employee with the money I make from renting a hotel room for one night.]

6) Use 'car lane'. [Correct. I would say: It uses one of the car lanes.]

There you are.

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