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Ilma Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

I need your correction of my poem.

Let it snow
then you will find that actually the truth wont ever can be hidden
even with the thickest snow that ever covered it

Let it snow
then you will know

Let it snow
then you will find that actually the truth wont ever can be hidden
even with the thickest snow that ever covered it

Let it snow
then you will know
who is the one that still survive, no matter what happened to them
Let it snow
Then you will see
How much is our mistakes
which even can't be covered
by the whitest snow

Let it snow
then you will realize
that life is never flat
just like the snow
that will easily melt away
when spring comes

So, let it snow

Well, i dont know how to make the right poem Emotion: big smile, can u please correct my poem? thx
  

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  • Hi ilma.
  • Here are a few suggestions for you.
  • Let it snow then you will find that actually the truth won' t ever can be hidden even with the thickest snow that ever covered it Let it snow then you will know Let it snow then you will find that actually the truth won't ever can be hidden even with the thickest snow that ever covered it Let it snow then you will know who is the one that still survives , no matter what happened to them Let it snow Then you will see How much is our many mistakes which even can't even be covered by the whitest snow Let it snow then you will realize that life is never flat just like the snow that will easily melt away when spring comes So, let it snow
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Hi ilma.

Here are a few suggestions for you.

Let it snow
then you will find that actually the truth won't ever can be hidden
even with the thickest snow that ever covered it

Let it snow
then you will know

Let it snow
then you will find that actually th
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yeap. but what i mean is i wanted to describe that our mistake will become uncountable because they are too many. how is it?

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