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Ashley30 Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
I need you help fixing grammer
hello, I have wrote sentences( not essay) but I think I have some grammatical error that I can't check myself... Could you pleased fix grammer for me??(below)
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3.Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory loss and maintain the body inactive.Americans take a good amount of sleep. Thus, the researcher started to investigate the relevence by experimental research. The result was, people who takes few hours of sleep tend to have poor memory and concentration. It also shows that stress hormones increases as well. The critical issue lead to sleep debt which accumulates both psycological and physical difficulties.
4.The research was done successfully. Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory impairments and maintain the body active. Unfortunately, few ne by experimental research. Psychologist David Dingers gathered volunteers in his laboratory and ordered them to take each of them different amounts of sleep. This is obvious experimental research because independent variable which is short hours of sleep affects dependent variable which is lack of concentration.
5. I agree with the results of the research. Because I actually haven't been getting enough sleep these days and it affects me hard time concentrating at my school and home. Suprisingly, my body doesn't work as well as I wish to be. On the other hand, when I take more than eight hours of sleep I feel well on the entire day.
After I read the experiment, I confirmed that having enough hours of sleep is one of the essential way to keep our body healthy.Only a tiny protion of people gets along with few hours of sleep but most of us need to take consistent amounts of sleep each day in order to work well at every places. The experiment shows cleary the result of negative side. So, we should not spend awake eliminating sleep hours. Because it is actually cause failure in our life.
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3.Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory loss and maintain the body inactive.Americans take a good amount of sleep. Thus, the researcher started to investigate the relevence by experimental research. The result was, people who takes few hours of sleep tend to have poor memory and concentration. It also shows that stress hormones increases as well. The critical issue lead to sleep debt which accumulates both psycological and physical difficulties.
4.The research was done successfully. Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory impairments and maintain the body active. Unfortunately, few ne by experimental research. Psychologist David Dingers gathered volunteers in his laboratory and ordered them to take each of them different amounts of sleep. This is obvious experimental research because independent variable which is short hours of sleep affects dependent variable which is lack of concentration.
5. I agree with the results of the research. Because I actually haven't been getting enough sleep these days and it affects me hard time concentrating at my school and home. Suprisingly, my body doesn't work as well as I wish to be. On the other hand, when I take more than eight hours of sleep I feel well on the entire day.
After I read the experiment, I confirmed that having enough hours of sleep is one of the essential way to keep our body healthy.Only a tiny protion of people gets along with few hours of sleep but most of us need to take consistent amounts of sleep each day in order to work well at every places. The experiment shows cleary the result of negative side. So, we should not spend awake eliminating sleep hours. Because it is actually cause failure in our life.
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Welcome Ashley30, Can you tell us more about your 3 paragraphs? Is this a homework assignment? Required for work?
- Welcome Ashley30, Can you tell us more about your 3 paragraphs?
- Is this a homework assignment?
- Required for work?
- By reading your paragraphs, I can tell English is a second language for you.
- You need to rework the word order in some of your paragraphs.
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Welcome Ashley30,
Can you tell us more about your 3 paragraphs? Is this a homework assignment? Required for work?
By reading your paragraphs, I can tell English is a second language for you. You need to rework the word order in some of your paragraphs. I will try to help you but you might have to wait until tomorrow before I get an answer to you. Of course, someone else m
Can you tell us more about your 3 paragraphs? Is this a homework assignment? Required for work?
By reading your paragraphs, I can tell English is a second language for you. You need to rework the word order in some of your paragraphs. I will try to help you but you might have to wait until tomorrow before I get an answer to you. Of course, someone else m
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yes. this is a homework assignment and just 3 paragraph is ok. again, not essay.
I fixed some below but still need your check.
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3. Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory loss and maintain the body inactive. Americans take a good amount of sleep. Thus, the researcher started to investigate the relevance by experimental res
I fixed some below but still need your check.
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3. Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory loss and maintain the body inactive. Americans take a good amount of sleep. Thus, the researcher started to investigate the relevance by experimental res
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3. Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory loss and maintain the body inactive. Americans take a good amount of sleep. Thus, the researcher started to investigate the relevance by experimental research. The result was, people who take few hours of sleep tend to have poor memory and concentration. It also shows that stress hormones in
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Thank you. I fixed some.
3. Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory loss and maintain the body active. Most Americans take few hours of sleep. Thus, a researcher started to investigate the relevance between length of sleep hours and its affect to body by experimental research. The result was, people who take few hours of sleep tend to
3. Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory loss and maintain the body active. Most Americans take few hours of sleep. Thus, a researcher started to investigate the relevance between length of sleep hours and its affect to body by experimental research. The result was, people who take few hours of sleep tend to
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Hi Ashley30,
You seemed to have reversed or ignored some of my suggestions.
Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory loss and maintain the body active. The first part is awkward. If you had commas, it would be better. The last part needs to be rewritten: maintain an active body.
"Most Americans take
You seemed to have reversed or ignored some of my suggestions.
Getting enough hours of sleep about eight hours a day is very helpful way to prevent memory loss and maintain the body active. The first part is awkward. If you had commas, it would be better. The last part needs to be rewritten: maintain an active body.
"Most Americans take
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