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In Europe and the USA, a lot of young people have an obesity problem. What can be done to solve this problem?Nowadays, an increasing number of population tend to suffer from obesity in various corners of the world. This issue causes a host of influences on the younger people’s health. It is not difficult to reduce.First and more most, staying away from fast food to have diets such as hamburgers, chips, chicken fried. They have high cholesterol and make obesity become seriously. When it comes to, alcohol is the same as calories as full mean. So to reduce the weight, people should not use alcohol. Instead of use drinking beer, wine people can use fruit juce to lose the weight and be good health.Moreover, I think that should eat a balanced diet to lose weight quickly and safetyly. Changing junk food by organic food, vegetables, which support people to cut down the number of the obese.Inclusion, having a slew of ways to advoid an obesity problem. However, people should maintain a balanced diet and notice car to choose good food for health

Teechr · Accepted Answer

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AlpheccaStars · Answer

Ng?c Huy?n 2928: I need some assistants, please help me.

An assistant is a person who works as a helper. For example, a doctor's assistant has special training in medical practice. They can take a patient's blood pressure and vital signs and do many things that a physician will do. But they cannot prescribe medication.

Assistance is an abstract noun. It means help or aid.

Do not confuse these two words. They are pronounced the same, but have very different meanings.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Nowadays, an increasing number of population (Wrong word. Population means all the people who live in a particular place. The population of the United States is about 330 million people. The population of New York City is about 8 million people. The populations of large cities in America have increased as more people move from rural to urban areas. ) tend to suffer from obesity in various corners of the world. (That is off-topic. The topic sentence gives specific places, not "various corners.") This ~~issue~~ causes a host of influences (That is not a natural phrase. ) on the younger people’s health. It is not difficult to reduce. (What? Obesity or number of people?)

First and more most, (Wrong phrase. you meant "foremost") staying away from fast food to have diets such as hamburgers, chips, chicken fried. (Do you mean fried chicken or chicken fried steak? Besides this is not a complete sentence. What is the subject? What is the verb? )

They have high cholesterol and make obesity become seriously. (Incorrect. Obesity is already a serious health issue. They cause obesity and heart disease. ) When it comes to, (Wrong punctuation. ) alcohol is the same as calories as full mean. (I do not know what you mean. This is not a good sentence. Alcohol is not calories. Alcohol contains calories or alcohol has calories.) . So to reduce ~~the~~ weight, people should not drink ~~use~~ alcohol. (We use pencils, computers and phones. We do not use drinks or food. We can abuse alcohol. That causes a different disease - alcoholism..) Instead of use drinking beer, wine (I do not understand "wine people". There are people who like to drink wine, but I don't think that is what you mean.) people can use fruit juce to lose ~~the~~ weight (Actually, fruit juice is very high in calories and sugars. One glass of orange juice has more calories than the same amount of beer. https://www.sparkpeople.com/food_vs_food.asp?food=99_106_orange-juice_versus_beer ) and be good health. (Ungrammatical. People are not health.)

Moreover, I think that should eat (Where is the subject of the verb "should eat"?) a balanced diet to lose weight quickly and safetyly. Changing junk food by organic food, vegetables, which support people to cut down the number of the obese. (That does not make any sense. )

Inclusion, having a slew of ways (Too informal.) to advoid an obesity problem. (This is not a sentence. There is no subject/verb.) However, people should maintain a balanced diet and notice car (Automobile?) to choose good food for health (Missing punctuation).

Teechr · Answer

Nowadays, an increasing number of ~~population tend to~~ young people are suffering from obesity in the West. ~~various corners of the world. This issue causes a host of influences on the younger people’s health.~~ Nevertheless, it is not difficult to deal with this problem if certain solutions are implemented. ~~reduce.~~

First and more most, staying away from fast food ~~to have diets~~ such as hamburgers, chips, [ 1] and [ 2] fried chicken would be a good start. ~~fried.~~ They have high cholesterol and ~~make~~ are a major contributor to obesity. ~~become seriously. When it comes to,~~ Moreover, alcohol is also highly calorific, ~~the same as calories as full mean.~~ so to reduce ~~the~~ weight, young people should ~~not use~~ limit how much alcohol they drink. Instead of ~~use~~ drinking beer or wine, people can ~~use~~ drink natural fruit juice to lose the weight and be ~~good~~ healthy.

Moreover, I think that young people should ~~eat~~ adopt a balanced diet to lose weight quickly and safely. ~~safetyly. Changing~~ For example, they should consider switching from junk food by to organic food, and eat more vegetables. That would help reduce the level of obesity in Western countries. ~~which support people to cut down the number of the obese.~~ [ 3]

~~Inclusion,~~ [ 4] In conclusion, ~~having a slew of ways to advoid an obesity problem. However, people~~ young individuals should maintain a balanced diet and [ 5] ~~notice car to~~ choose ~~good~~ [ 6] healthy food ~~for~~ to lose weight and stay healthy.

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[ 1]: Always use “and” or “or” at the end of a list, even if that list has only two items.

[ 2]: In English, the adjective (fried) comes before the noun (chicken).

[ 3]: That part should not be a separate paragraph. It should be merged with the one above, because it talks about the same point (food/diet). Your second body paragraph should deal with a new idea; for example, you can talk about encouraging young people to be physically active and do more exercise.

[ 4]: We say “In conclusion” in the final paragraph of an essay. “Inclusion” is wrong.

[ 5]: “car” and “care” are different words. Be mindful of your spelling, and ALWAYS check your own work before submitting it to the teacher or examiner.

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