I NEED HELP WITH THIS ESSAY PLZZZZ

It can not be ignored the significance of kids in the transformation of society when you consider that they are taken into consideration to be destiny citizens. That is very poor English. It is incomprehensible. I have no idea what "transformation of society" means or "destiny citizens". Do not try to write "sophisticated" English. It will be an utter disaster. Write simple English with words that you understand very very well. The purpose of Task 2 is to communicate your ideas. It is not to show that you have memorized a lot of dictionary words.

It is an arguable topic, (Do not use a memorized response.) whether or not babies ( Wrong word. The topic is not about babies. ) are to be familiarized (wrong word) with the kindergarten earlier than their fundamental research (That makes no sense) or to spend that degree (wrong word) with their family. In the approaching paragraphs, education might be mentioned in detail.

(That makes no sense. "approaching paragraphs" is completely unnatural English.)

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Many students think that if they use high-level vocabulary, they will get a higher band score. This is a false impression. One of the four scoring criteria for Task 2 is "Lexical Resource." A student with a high level of lexical resource not only knows many words, but they know how to use them. Here are the descriptors:

Band score 7:

- uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
- uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
- may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

Band score 6:

- uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
- attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
- makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication

The issue with your essay is that you make many errors in word choice, collocations and usage. It is not enough to know a word from the dictionary; you have to use it correctly in a sentence. So it is much better to use vocabulary you know well than to make a lot of errors with words you are uncertain about.

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Here is a sample opening paragraph for this topic:

Topic: Some people think that it is beneficial for young children to be sent to nursery school before starting primary school. Other people think that young children should spend time with their family instead of going to nursery school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

All children are required to start school at the age of six or seven, but some parents enroll their children in pre-school or nursery school when they are as young as three. Other parents decide to keep their children at home, and teach them at home. In my view, nursery school is an excellent idea since children will get a head start on their education there.