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Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to you to express my interest in applying for the M.Sc Urban Studies at Vrije Universite Brussels, otherwise known as 4 Cities, which is scheduled to start by September, 2015. I strongly believe that my educational background, work experience and deep concern in environmental management make me a very good candidate for this program.
I graduated with a bachelor’s degree in Physics Electronics from Ekiti State University, Nigeria. I got Second Class honors (lower Division) as you can see in my academic transcript. Due to the wide range of different disciplines that Environmental Science involves, soon after starting my studies I realized that urbanization is an aspect which I have developed keen interest in.

My foundational knowledge with Physics Electronics and my little experience in the electrical field has motivated me to study more on urbanization and electricity, and also how to spread the knowledge of electrification to modern day interactions. It will also widen my knowledge on urbanization from antiquity to present day and also analyze development of buildings, cities, and landscapes on regions with an emphasis on social, economic, technological, ecological and infrastructural systems.

My project was based measurement of temperature using wind speed and humidity, with that, I plan to work on how to harness the wind to provide electricity to modern urban settings and also to let the rural settlements become urbanized through my ideas and impact. It would also be great for me to affect the economic and social circumstances in my country that affect the urban living.

My objective is to pursue the M.Sc. in Urban Studies, taught entirely in English, plus living and breathing the international atmosphere and integrating with English and other language speaking people in order to know more about their cultures. This is undoubtedly one of the motivations for studying this course. More significantly, that Nigeria is a developing country has generated various weaknesses in urban structure and infrastructure system which are illogical comprehension planning and zoning, traffic jams, downgrading of urban road, water drainage and environmental pollution. Thus, it is undoubtedly that my professional projects after completing the Master program is to record much more tools in urban planning and certain level of knowledge in society management which shall create opportunity and confidence necessary to work and contribute to the innovation of my region.

I came to realization that studying and living abroad can help not only broaden my horizons but also accelerate my personal and academic growth as well. The main reasons for choosing is 4 Cities programs is the high quality of education that the institutions involved will offer, the opportunity of meeting and associating with people from all over the world and to be immersed in a society with a global outlook and a model to be followed in my viewpoint.
In conclusion, Irrespective of high application prerequisites of this course, I am determined to make the most out of it. My background and interdisciplinary education will add more diversity to the program. Furthermore, I will optimize my stay at all the participating universities to garner a wealth of ideas that will immediately apply when I return to my country and at the same time contribute to the University's diversity.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours Sincerely,