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Mystik Posted 19 years ago
Hi all!
For some reason, I have put this topic onto the TEFL forum by mistake and I cannot delete it now, so I'm copying it here, hoping that someone might help me with this.
I am making my portfolio in English and, as you can see, it's not perfect, so I'm going to need your help...Can someone correct this for me?
Here is the text that I need for tomorrow...Thank you very much in advance...
Borko***
I don't know how to write nicely and corectly
because I've never had the need to write
with a pen. I have the Internet and a mobile
phone and i'm happy with it...
Our future generations don’t use their brain
because we made them much easier with all
technology that we created. They don’t know
to write nicely and corectly and they don’t have
need to learn it.
They are throwing away the chance which
more than 90% of population in 18th century
didn’t have...
You can see a plant on the right side of this page. One
part of it is dead, brown, lifeless. But other parts of it are
still very beautiful and full of life. You will probably
smile when you see these perfect yellow flowers,
but if you take a closer look at them, you will be
able to see the parts that have already died...
This flower can be compared to our planet
and our history on it. There is not much
of it left. Everything that was worth
mentioning is gone now and it is
nobody’s fault but ours... and we are
leaving all this to the future
generations to deal with...
Ask yourselves one question
and then open my portfolio...
Where and how did we
lost our world?
High heels, short skurts, in some lifes for an hour or even less...
Their first impresion is the money which seems easy to earn, but is ist really so?
This young girls only mesteake was her
deseare to be like her parents. Her parents
are smokers and this young girl think it is okay
to smoke and it is very cool and healthy...
So once again we are wrong example to
our future generations.
---------------------------------------------------
No thts not a bags full of food and comsetics.
They are full of cloths and they belong to an
homeless... If they have luck they would have
a place to sleep and they are thankful. They
don’t care about wetness, dirtyness and
deseases... Nowadays it is comon problem.
Nobody care...
------------------------------------------------
Our world is a place in which is difficult to survive and make
your dreams come true.Some try and they may be successful
but most of us are satisfied with this what we achieved.We
don’t try to change almost anything and we are fine with bad
life conditions, high rates of crimes in our neihgbour, deseases
knocking on our doors... Or we are too scared to try tochange
our world to be better place for us and people that we love?
I think we need to find light and goal in our lifes. My goal was
to make this portfolio good enough for you and to proofe to
myself that I can do it. I had “black downs” and “breakdowns”
too many times and I found my light that guided me through
all the way. It was one of the very first pictures that I made
with my new camera and I was just amazed with it. You can
see it on the right side... i print it on my wall and everytime I
have toughts to throw it all away I find inspirations in it..
For this project I found my light...
Have you found your light for the project called “life”?!
The two beautiful nature pictures I took in Vienna downtown...You are
probably aware of “Stadtpark” and its beauty... I just wish more places
like this one in the world (if I forget kind of people that “works” there).
"Volksgarten” is one of the most beautiful parks I have seen.
The most beautiful plants that “mother nature” created are
placed in this park. But with mans help and sense of
creations. A man projected all so how he wanted it to be.
I don’t say it is bad or ugly, I just want to say...No, I want
to ask when we become mother nature?
Happy family is rear nowadays...
But so nice picture to see.So perfect...
Did you have one?
“Museumsquartier” is one of the most visited places by students. There they are
having some of their best weekends and parties. After those crazy weekends
the streets are full with beer bottles and other alcohol... But this glass left on the wall
in front of “Museumswurtier” is really special... Isn’t it?
Grammar
I need help with portfolio
Hi all!
For some reason, I have put this topic onto the TEFL forum by mistake and I cannot delete it now, so I'm copying it here, hoping that someone might help me with this.
I am making my portfolio in English and, as you can see, it's not perfect, so I'm going to need your help...Can someone correct this for me?
Here is the text that I need for tomorrow...Thank you very much in advance...
Borko***
I don't know how to write nicely and corectly
because I've never had the need to write
with a pen. I have the Internet and a mobile
phone and i'm happy with it...
Our future generations don’t use their brain
because we made them much easier with all
technology that we created. They don’t know
to write nicely and corectly and they don’t have
need to learn it.
They are throwing away the chance which
more than 90% of population in 18th century
didn’t have...
You can see a plant on the right side of this page. One
part of it is dead, brown, lifeless. But other parts of it are
still very beautiful and full of life. You will probably
smile when you see these perfect yellow flowers,
but if you take a closer look at them, you will be
able to see the parts that have already died...
This flower can be compared to our planet
and our history on it. There is not much
of it left. Everything that was worth
mentioning is gone now and it is
nobody’s fault but ours... and we are
leaving all this to the future
generations to deal with...
Ask yourselves one question
and then open my portfolio...
Where and how did we
lost our world?
High heels, short skurts, in some lifes for an hour or even less...
Their first impresion is the money which seems easy to earn, but is ist really so?
This young girls only mesteake was her
deseare to be like her parents. Her parents
are smokers and this young girl think it is okay
to smoke and it is very cool and healthy...
So once again we are wrong example to
our future generations.
---------------------------------------------------
No thts not a bags full of food and comsetics.
They are full of cloths and they belong to an
homeless... If they have luck they would have
a place to sleep and they are thankful. They
don’t care about wetness, dirtyness and
deseases... Nowadays it is comon problem.
Nobody care...
------------------------------------------------
Our world is a place in which is difficult to survive and make
your dreams come true.Some try and they may be successful
but most of us are satisfied with this what we achieved.We
don’t try to change almost anything and we are fine with bad
life conditions, high rates of crimes in our neihgbour, deseases
knocking on our doors... Or we are too scared to try tochange
our world to be better place for us and people that we love?
I think we need to find light and goal in our lifes. My goal was
to make this portfolio good enough for you and to proofe to
myself that I can do it. I had “black downs” and “breakdowns”
too many times and I found my light that guided me through
all the way. It was one of the very first pictures that I made
with my new camera and I was just amazed with it. You can
see it on the right side... i print it on my wall and everytime I
have toughts to throw it all away I find inspirations in it..
For this project I found my light...
Have you found your light for the project called “life”?!
The two beautiful nature pictures I took in Vienna downtown...You are
probably aware of “Stadtpark” and its beauty... I just wish more places
like this one in the world (if I forget kind of people that “works” there).
"Volksgarten” is one of the most beautiful parks I have seen.
The most beautiful plants that “mother nature” created are
placed in this park. But with mans help and sense of
creations. A man projected all so how he wanted it to be.
I don’t say it is bad or ugly, I just want to say...No, I want
to ask when we become mother nature?
Happy family is rear nowadays...
But so nice picture to see.So perfect...
Did you have one?
“Museumsquartier” is one of the most visited places by students. There they are
having some of their best weekends and parties. After those crazy weekends
the streets are full with beer bottles and other alcohol... But this glass left on the wall
in front of “Museumswurtier” is really special... Isn’t it?
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Hi Mystic, Welcome to the forums. You will have more luck with a response if you post each one of your essays individually. This is just too much to handle at one time.
- Hi Mystic, Welcome to the forums.
- You will have more luck with a response if you post each one of your essays individually.
- This is just too much to handle at one time.
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Hi Mystic,
Welcome to the forums.
You will have more luck with a response if you post each one of your essays individually. This is just too much to handle at one time.
Welcome to the forums.
You will have more luck with a response if you post each one of your essays individually. This is just too much to handle at one time.
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