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Kalei Posted 19 years ago
Grammar

I need Help correcting this sentence, please

Driving to the coast, the sun warmed my arms and legs as I anticipated my dinner with Julia Roberts.

How should this sentence be rewritten for grammatical correctness?

Thanks,

Kalei
  

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Hi Kalei, Welcome to the forums. The grammatical problem is that "Driving to the coast" needs to modify the person driving, not the sun. If you want to start wth "Driving to the coast," then "I" needs to start the next clause.

— BarbaraPA

  • Hi Kalei, Welcome to the forums.
  • The grammatical problem is that "Driving to the coast" needs to modify the person driving, not the sun.
  • If you want to start wth "Driving to the coast," then "I" needs to start the next clause.
  • The sentence tries to have too many things, though - your anticipation, the dinner, the warming sun, the drive...
  • it would be better broken up a little bit.
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Hi Kalei,
Welcome to the forums.

The grammatical problem is that "Driving to the coast" needs to modify the person driving, not the sun. If you want to start wth "Driving to the coast," then "I" needs to start the next clause.

The sentence tries to have too many things, though - your anticipation, the dinner, the warming sun, the drive... it would be better broken up a littl
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Hi,

Driving to the coast, the sun warmed my arms and legs as I anticipated my dinner with Julia Roberts.


The problem is that the phrase 'driving to the coast' seems to modify 'the sun'. So, you need to reword it. eg

During my drive to the coast, the sun warmed my arms and legs as I anticipated my dinner with
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