I need critics for this poem

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00Here is my poem. I want some critics, PLEASE:02br
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00It hurts to be alone02br
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00It hurts to see the loneliness - coughing at your window02br
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00The empty house you live in, doesn't fill with people, but stares at the garden02br
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00Your heart beats faster now. But what about - your mind?02br
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00Your mind is disappearing - there in the sea, in the lake, the river02br
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00If you move - they move. If you stay - they stay. Who are they? - 02br
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00Loneliness and empty house, lie and secret, a spider and a Scorpion02br
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00Don't let them run away - the o only ones you've got. Don't let them laugh.02br
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00No - don't let them! They are no one else but you now. They are but Poetry02br
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00Sing to them, and draw them pictures. They will stay - they will play with you.02br
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00The cup of tea you hold is spilling down the freezing floor you step on,02br
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00The wooden sticks you have still - are burning fast. Your hair is white,02br
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00Your lips are getting blue. And your shawl is falling down, falling from your dirty necklace02br
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00The memories of dying father near by your pillow are now alive again and stronger02br
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00The paper says: '' There, in Iraq - thirty corpses lay, the ground is filled with blood''02br
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00And you feel like sorrow now is running through your veins. 02br
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00The loneliness still coughs - there - staring at you now. But - you let her come02br
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00Her black eyes are touching you softly - touching your arms, biting you with anger02br
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00But no - you let her come. She ripped out the photos on your wall.02br
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00Your flowers died. It smells of candle – It’s the only light you’ve got02br
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00But the candle grows smaller and smaller – It will finish soon.02br
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00It will be dark, but your heart still pumps.02br
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00It hurts to see the loneliness - coughing at your window 02br
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00The empty house you live in, doesn't fill with people, but stares at the garden02br
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00Your heart beats faster now. But what about your mind?0-