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Help Wanted Posted 23 years ago
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I need advise on simplifying a sentence.
I hope my future life will turn out as it is envisaged. Hence, I will work hard for a bright future ahead.
Does the sentence above make itself clear? Please help correct it if there's any mistakes...Thanks again, teachers!
Does the sentence above make itself clear? Please help correct it if there's any mistakes...Thanks again, teachers!
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Better would be: "I hope my life will turn out as I envisage it. " In the original form, it is unclear who is doing the envisaging. Also, "future" in the first sentence and "ahead" in the second are redundant.
- Better would be: "I hope my life will turn out as I envisage it.
- " In the original form, it is unclear who is doing the envisaging.
- Also, "future" in the first sentence and "ahead" in the second are redundant.
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Better would be:
"I hope my life will turn out as I envisage it. Hence, I will work hard for a bright future."
In the original form, it is unclear who is doing the envisaging. Also, "future" in the first sentence and "ahead" in the second are redundant.
"I hope my life will turn out as I envisage it. Hence, I will work hard for a bright future."
In the original form, it is unclear who is doing the envisaging. Also, "future" in the first sentence and "ahead" in the second are redundant.
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