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Jo87 Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing

I have modified my cover letter but i still need help correcting it!

0This is the modified cover letter that i wrote. The one i will send really really soon...(i hope) Could you please correct my grammar mistakes and help my out with the last sentence?! Where can i put it in the text and how can i write it to make it sound good with the rest of the text?!?!?!02br
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00Thank you soooooooooo much..02br
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00Sara02br
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00Name+ Address02br
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00December 8, 200602br
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00......., Office Manager02br
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00ABC Company02br
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00...New York, NY 02br
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00Dear Ms. ...,02br
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00If you are looking for a determined and detail-oriented person who will contribute to your company’s success, I would like to encourage you to consider my application for a 4 months internship starting February 2007. 02br
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00I learned about ... on the Internet, while I was reading an article on the “Special Events Magazine” website. Reaching such high standards and such a high quality of services is definitely something commendable in my opinion.02br
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00My name is .. and I am a .. years old highly motivated student at the University of ..., the first trilingual university in .... Currently I’m in the second year of a three year bachelor’s degree in Economics and Management Sciences, with a major in Tourism Management.02br
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00I have always thought that theory is the basis of everything, but at the same time I am convinced that experience is what makes a person unique. I am ready to learn more and to add value to a company that has a lot to offer. I am confident that courses in marketing, event management, communication and promotion of tourism combined with several business courses and with my genuine interest for the special events field, will make me a good candidate for an internship in your company.02br
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00Personally, I define myself as an energetic and open-minded achiever with a dynamic, goal-orientated attitude and with an insatiable appetite to keep learning. I have always demonstrated commitment to excellence, through my academic career and through my previous working experience. If you give me the opportunity, I will be glad to continue this commitment to excellence by working in your company. 02br
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00I would appreciate the opportunity to discuss the position with you, so I will contact you in a week or ten days to answer any questions you may have and discuss opportunities with .... 02br
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00Should you have any questions before that time, you may reach me via email at .... Thank you for your time and consideration. 02br
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00Sincerely,02br
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00...02br
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00(Visa costs will be borne by the University of .... Health insurance, insurance against accidents and civil responsibility insurance will also be provided by my university).02br
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00--->>>>> where can i put this and how can i say it!??!0-
  

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0 It looks fine as it is - nicely enthusiastic but not over the top, and grammatically correct. 02font 0-

  • 0 It looks fine as it is - nicely enthusiastic but not over the top, and grammatically correct.
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0 It looks fine as it is - nicely enthusiastic but not over the top, and grammatically correct. I would insert the bit about the visa and insurance after this: 02br
01font00 I will be glad to continue this commitment to excellence by working in your company.02font0-

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