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As young people are growing fast day by day, it is undeniable that when reaching a certain age, teenagers will be given their privileges as well as responsibilities. Generally speaking, troubles are inevitable, this can lead to negative effects on the young. In this essay, I will outline two dangers and the extent of interference of parents' care.
The first thing that should be taken into account is safety. Whenever children get permission to go outside, it is time when dangers could approach them. For instance, using motorbikes for an adventurous game like racing is the trend that they prefer. It also goes along with the risks of robbery or intense fightings, which may cause adverse consequences even death. Thus, parents must teach them about it early and especially intervene in their lives in possible periods to prevent the disadvantages or misfortunes.
Another problem that can happen whether the teens get their rights is the bad relationships. They would organize gangs, groups, in which adolescents amalgamate together to build it bigger for purposes or the possibility of being taken in by strangers because they are innocent. For example misusing drugs, trading prohibited goods. Therefore, parents must take action as soon as possible, particularly since their children's childhood.
In short, following the two situations above is beneficial for the young people as a whole society. Parents also may need the knowledge and information outside to perform well in protecting their sons or daughters. But they also should not exercise too much control over their children if they hope to see good outcomes.