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The effects of improved technology on my life
Improved technology has had different effects on my life. I think the sweetest one is keeping in touch with my best friend who migrated to Malaysia. And also I could find such nice friends in virtual world who are sympathetic persons toward me. But the second effect is really Regrettable. When I was a teenager, improved technology made a gap between me and my family. I used to send instant messaging or surf on internet a lot. Actually it made me an addictive girl. So as a result I didn't like to spend time with my family.
  

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The Effects of Improved Technology on my Life Improved technology has had different effects on my life. I think the sweetest one is keeping in touch with my best friend who migrated to Malaysia. Also, I can find such nice friends in the virtual world who are sympathetic to me.

  • The Effects of Improved Technology on my Life Improved technology has had different effects on my life.
  • I think the sweetest one is keeping in touch with my best friend who migrated to Malaysia.
  • Also, I can find such nice friends in the virtual world who are sympathetic to me.
  • But the second effect is really regrettable.
  • When I was a teenager, improved technology made a gap between me and my family.
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The Effects of Improved Technology on my Life

Improved technology has had different effects on my life. I think the sweetest one is keeping in touch with my best friend who migrated to Malaysia. Also, I can find such nice friends in the virtual world who are sympathetic to me. But the second effect is really regrettable. When I was a teenager, improved technology made a gap between me and

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