I had a dream
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Last night, I had a dream. I saw that I was wearing a beautiful white dress and was standing outside a building. The building was on the bank of a lake like a harbour. The part of the lake close to the building was frozen, and there was a man lying inside that frozen water like a dead man in a coffin. I stretched my hand towards him to take him out. But before I could do anything a big fish, out of nowhere, came and hit the frozen part with its head so hard that it, along with the man, broke into pieces. With this I woke up.
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sundarnaz I saw that I was wearing a beautiful white dress You can omit the highlighted part because you have already the context, which is a dream. sundarnaz The building was on the bank of a lake like a harbour. Bank is only familiar with rivers so, you need a different word.
- sundarnaz I saw that I was wearing a beautiful white dress You can omit the highlighted part because you have already the context, which is a dream.
- sundarnaz The building was on the bank of a lake like a harbour.
- Bank is only familiar with rivers so, you need a different word.
- You could use edge or shore .
- Lakes and harbours aren't really the same so, you should rewrite the last part.
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sundarnazI saw that I was wearing a beautiful white dress
You can omit the highlighted part because you have already the context, which is a dream.
sundarnazThe building was on the bank of a lake like a harbour.
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