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ABSTRACT
After studying at Hanoi University Of Industry, I had the deep and large knowledge in many subjects, such as Microcontroller Unit, Computer Network, Designing PCB Boards, and so on. So I chose this Scientific Research Project, “Research TCP/IP Protocol – Measurement And Control Devices Over The Internet”.
After finishing this, I understood how to the Internet works and I could master it. Now, I can design the Server Board by myself. I can use my computer to enter the Server Adress at http://192.168.1.25/, if I am in LAN network, then I see the temperature and Gas sensor, I can turn on or off the light and loudspeaker if I want. Beside that, I can enter in Server Adress by http://duydt2k3.hopto.org/ if I am out of LAN network, such as Internet.
I hope this project is useful in other places, too, such as Industrial Park, Company, and Hospital. They can connect a Camera to this Server Board and control it to see overall sight. Beside that, they can use this Server Board to control any devices in their place without checking directly or they can measure the temperature and Gas sensor.
Now, whenever I use any devices connected to the Internet at any where, I can control every devices in my house and see the temperature. That’s great!
P/S: i wrote it myself