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00I am not a native English and I had to write a long essay about the Theory of Jutice-Rawls. I have proofread it and every thing but I am not sure about the following passages. Please can someone 01del00native English preferably02del00 can have a look at it and correct the spelling, grammar and flow. It has to remain very academic. Thank you very much in advance to anyone that can help before Monday. Oh yes! The passagedo not follow each other in my essay!02br
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00 With A01i00 theory of Justice02i00 (ATJ), John Rawls attempts to propose an alternative to the major political view dominating Anglo-Saxon politics, namely utilitarianism01i00.02i00 As such, Rawls' work emphasises the rights of the individuals over the good. 00Rawls focuses on the basic structure of the society and aims to demonstrate that it can become efficient in bringing social liberties and equality into balance.02br
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00Finally, Rawls not only justifies the original position as optimum in initiating impartial negotiations that are to lead to fair principles of justice; but as a means to evince our inner presuppositions00 00about social justice. While the veil of ignorance negates arbitrary public outcomes, the process of negotiations under the veil of ignorance generates a00 00'reflective equilibrium'00.00 00Explicitly, this means that individuals, being divested from their backgrounds and through the constraints of 01i00reasonable02i00 deliberation, would be able ascertain their fundamental conviction of justice.00 00The hypothetical nature of the original position is justified by the fact that its aims to unveil unbiased principles of justice upon which a 01i00fair02i00 society can be formed.02br
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00In conclusion, Rawls propose a theory which In conclusion, Rawls propose a theory which assigns the basic structure of society as the main actor of social justice. In order to do this, he developed a hypothetical social contract in which individuals have to decide on the very principles of justice that will be the basis of their society. Rawls demonstrates that under impartial circumstances and bound by a common desire to improve one's good, individuals would opt for principles which would unconditionally protect their equal rights and liberties. According to Rawls, the reflective equilibrium reached from the original position gives, credence to his theory. This contradicts counteracts utilitarian notion of society. 0-
  

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02i 00 As such, Rawls'01font 00s02font 00 work emphasises the rights of 01font 00(omit 'the')02font 00 individuals over the good 01font 00(of what? )02font 00. 02br 02br 00Finally, Rawls not only justifies the original position as optimum 01font 00(I don't believe that your usage of 'optimum' is incorrect, but 'optimal' sounds better to me here)02font 00 01font 00for02font 00 initiating impartial negotiations that are to 01font 00(I would substitute 'which will' for 'that are to')02font 00 lead to fair principles of justice01font 00,02font 00 but 01font 00(also)02font 00 as a means to evince our inner presuppositions about social justice.

  • 02i 00 As such, Rawls'01font 00s02font 00 work emphasises the rights of 01font 00(omit 'the')02font 00 individuals over the good 01font 00(of what?
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  • 02br 02br 00Finally, Rawls not only justifies the original position as optimum 01font 00(I don't believe that your usage of 'optimum' is incorrect, but 'optimal' sounds better to me here)02font 00 01font 00for02font 00 initiating impartial negotiations that are to 01font 00(I would substitute 'which will' for 'that are to')02font 00 lead to fair principles of justice01font 00,02font 00 but 01font 00(also)02font 00 as a means to evince our inner presuppositions about social justice.
  • While the veil of ignorance negates arbitrary public outcomes, the process of negotiations under the veil of ignorance generates a 'reflective equilibrium' 01font 00(you need to offer the literal meaning of the metaphor 'the veil of ignorance' if you haven't earlier in your essay)02font 00.
  • Explicitly, this means that individuals, being divested from their backgrounds and through the constraints of 01i 00reasonable02i 00 deliberation, would be able 01font 00to02font 00 ascertain 01font 00('ascertain' is an odd word choice as it implies discovery instead of decision or conclusion)02font 00 their fundamental conviction of justice.
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00 With A01i00 01font00T02font00heory of Justice02i00 (ATJ), John Rawls attempts to propose 01font00('attempts to propose', or simply 'proposes'?)02font00 an alternative to the major political view dominating Anglo-Saxon politics, namely utilitarianism01i00

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