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Kedra Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing
I composed a salary increase request. Any advice is appreciated. Thank you!
This is a do-or-die situation. This letter is a very important request, the confirmation of which will influence the further career of three persons in my company. It is addressed to a CFO of a big company, which is located overseas, and the brahcn of which our company works in. I am interested bot in style and grammar of the text. Any of your advices are much appreciated.
Dear XXX,
We appreciate the opportunity, which ComapnyX Team has had during the last 3 years of cooperating with the YYY Corporation. During this period we have been successfully working together with you, and we firmly believe our well-established relationship has proven to be mutually beneficial so far.
The last few months were especially challenging, because we had to do a lot of work out of the original scope of works, and our responsibilities have been increased significantly. However, in overcoming these temporary difficulties we have gained valuable experience and knowledge.
Here are some highlights of how the CompanyX has recently contributed to the YYY Corporation development:
- The writing of the design and functional specifications for newly-created content, such as 1, 2, 3 and 4. The tasks, which were assigned earlier to our team only included 5, 6, 7 modules maintenance and bug fixing;
- A close interaction with other YYY brahnces team members (consultations to and training of the newly-hired QA engineers, due to the recent YYY branches closings and reducing of QA engineers staff);
- On-the-fly responsiveness in urgent problem solving (urgent bug fixes, timely supply of requested information and status updates), which results in extra man hours.
- Readiness to work at night in critical situations in order to provide timely assistance and support (Product maintenance for ZZZ Company)
Given to our contributions to YYY’s achievements, and recently increased inflation rate in our country (increased cost of Internet, rent, utilities) we kindly ask you to consider the %% salary increase for each of CompanyX emloyees, working on YYY's projects: employe nameA, nameB, nameC
We are very positive about our position in YYY and appreciate the current relations between our teams. The CompanyX is ready to work hard as it did before and make further contributions to YYY’s development and growth.
We hope it would be possible to reach an acceptable agreement and look forward to hearing from you.
Best Regards,
AAAAA
Dear XXX,
We appreciate the opportunity, which ComapnyX Team has had during the last 3 years of cooperating with the YYY Corporation. During this period we have been successfully working together with you, and we firmly believe our well-established relationship has proven to be mutually beneficial so far.
The last few months were especially challenging, because we had to do a lot of work out of the original scope of works, and our responsibilities have been increased significantly. However, in overcoming these temporary difficulties we have gained valuable experience and knowledge.
Here are some highlights of how the CompanyX has recently contributed to the YYY Corporation development:
- The writing of the design and functional specifications for newly-created content, such as 1, 2, 3 and 4. The tasks, which were assigned earlier to our team only included 5, 6, 7 modules maintenance and bug fixing;
- A close interaction with other YYY brahnces team members (consultations to and training of the newly-hired QA engineers, due to the recent YYY branches closings and reducing of QA engineers staff);
- On-the-fly responsiveness in urgent problem solving (urgent bug fixes, timely supply of requested information and status updates), which results in extra man hours.
- Readiness to work at night in critical situations in order to provide timely assistance and support (Product maintenance for ZZZ Company)
Given to our contributions to YYY’s achievements, and recently increased inflation rate in our country (increased cost of Internet, rent, utilities) we kindly ask you to consider the %% salary increase for each of CompanyX emloyees, working on YYY's projects: employe nameA, nameB, nameC
We are very positive about our position in YYY and appreciate the current relations between our teams. The CompanyX is ready to work hard as it did before and make further contributions to YYY’s development and growth.
We hope it would be possible to reach an acceptable agreement and look forward to hearing from you.
Best Regards,
AAAAA
Top answer
Hi Kedra, This seems very good to me. I've made some suggested changes, so please read carefully. Good luck, Clive This is a do-or-die situation.
- Hi Kedra, This seems very good to me.
- I've made some suggested changes, so please read carefully.
- Good luck, Clive This is a do-or-die situation.
- This letter is a very important request, the confirmation of which will influence the further career of three persons in my company.
- It is addressed to a CFO of a big company, which is located overseas, and the brahcn of which our company works in.
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Hi Kedra,
This seems very good to me. I've made some suggested changes, so please read carefully.
Good luck, Clive
This is a do-or-die situation. This letter is a very important request, the confirmation of which will influence the further career of three persons in my company. It is addressed to a CFO of a big company, which is located overseas, a
This seems very good to me. I've made some suggested changes, so please read carefully.
Good luck, Clive
This is a do-or-die situation. This letter is a very important request, the confirmation of which will influence the further career of three persons in my company. It is addressed to a CFO of a big company, which is located overseas, a
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Hi Clive! I appreciate your help. I have looked through the corrections carefully and made the necessary changes to my copy. I hope the request will be cinfirmed. Thank you very much for your assistance [Y]
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Dear Sir,
With due respect, I may state here that I have been working in this organization since 1994. As your good self is aware that not only I am looking after all export activities but also import activities are taken care by me. In addition, I am also responsible for getting the PDC released by customs authorities. So, considering all th
With due respect, I may state here that I have been working in this organization since 1994. As your good self is aware that not only I am looking after all export activities but also import activities are taken care by me. In addition, I am also responsible for getting the PDC released by customs authorities. So, considering all th
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