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Surfer Posted 13 years ago
Grammar

How would you rate.

The educational system in this country follows a traditional path in that it walks students through a number of consecutive phases with each phase serving as basis for the one after it. The total length of study extends across the phases to a total of 12 years.
The model to which the system was structured is universal, though the outcome over the years haven't been as promising and many revisions were attempted in hope to elevate students acheivement levels and attribute the system with a credible reputation to the end of leveraging academic contribution as means to attracting forign students into coming to the country and, consequently, the economical benefits that such students bring along as they live and study in the country.

As a teacher, what mark would you give for the above paragraph? (1-10)

Thank you.
  

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Hi, What level are you studying at? eg beginner / high beginner / intermediate / high intermediate / advanced ? Clive

  • Hi, What level are you studying at?
  • eg beginner / high beginner / intermediate / high intermediate / advanced ?
  • Clive
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Hi,
What level are you studying at?

eg beginner / high beginner / intermediate / high intermediate / advanced ?

Clive
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CliveHi,What level are you studying at?eg beginner / high beginner / intermediate / high intermediate / advanced ?Clive
Hello Clive.

I'm neither studying nor involved in anything alike, it's more of a personal hobby.. .
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Hi,

The educational system in this country follows a traditional path in that it walks students through a number of consecutive phases with each phase serving as basis for the one after it. The total length of study extends across the phases to a total of 12 years.
The model to which the system was structured is universal, though the outcome over the years haven't been as pr
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Thank you Clive.

I really hate to bother you with this, but I changed the second paragraph and would like you to take a look at it:

The educational system in this country follows a traditional path in that it walks students through a number of consecutive phases with each phase serving as basis for the one after it. The total length of study extends across the phases to a tota
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What do you think teachers?

Thank you.
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Hi,

Still 6. Maybe 5.
You haven't improved it. And you still have a final sentence that is much, much too long, and awkward, and hard to comprehend, and full of errors.
It seems as if you are trying too hard. Try to be as simple, clear and dire
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Can you pinpoint some of the errors please? I'd really appreciate it, thank you.
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Hi,

The model to which the system was structured is has been universally adopted, with many successful examples from around the globe. However, outcomes over the years haven't don't use abbreviations in this elevated style of text been as good as g
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Thank you very much Clive.

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