How to shape a passage to sound smoother

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THe topic is about "Life in the future"

Below is a conclusion of an essay:

What will be, will be. At this very moment, it is just for us to study hard and try our best at every minute, for this is the stepping stone for fulfilling my dream.

Any better way of expressing it? Please help amend it to sound smoother, teachers! Thanks very much! :"(

Whl626 · Accepted Answer

Now is the time for us to study hard and try our best at every endeavour, for this is the proper mindset we need to fulfill our dream <img class='emoticon' style='Width:19px;Height:19px;' data-delaysrc='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/1.gif' src='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/1.gif' alt='Emotion: smile'/>

Help Wanted · Answer

This is beautiful! Thanks soooo much for the amendment, teacher whl626! ^o^

Whl626 · Answer

Oh, teacher again

. A fake one

The conclusion is a bit contradictory because if what will be, will be. We don't need to study hard hehe.

" We try our best is a stepping stone " doesn't sound logical though.

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