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Vgv8 Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
How to rewrite this sentence without repetitions and/or passive voice?
[1, p.72] re-writes the sentence:
"Weight reduction can be accomplished only by reducing the density"
as
"Weight can be reduced only by reducing the density"
instead.
How can it be written:
1)
without using passive voice
and/or
2)repetitions of "reduced"/"reducing"/"reduction")?
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Brogan, John A. Clear Technical Writing
"Weight reduction can be accomplished only by reducing the density"
as
"Weight can be reduced only by reducing the density"
instead.
How can it be written:
1)
without using passive voice
and/or
2)repetitions of "reduced"/"reducing"/"reduction")?
[1]
Brogan, John A. Clear Technical Writing
Top answer
You can lose weight only by reducing density.
- You can lose weight only by reducing density.
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Thanks!
This is, I guess, technical writing and not about humans' (or your) weight.
I believe both active and clear writing cannot be achieved simultaneously
Can you tell me what conveys "the" vs. its absence before "density?
This is, I guess, technical writing and not about humans' (or your) weight.
I believe both active and clear writing cannot be achieved simultaneously
Can you tell me what conveys "the" vs. its absence before "density?
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I can't tell you because I have no idea what 'density' means here. I omitted 'the' in error; I meant to duplicate the original in meaning.
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