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Mehrdadsin Posted 20 years ago
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gives humans qualities increasingly after blue's partner separated by his owner and her breath gets faster when she involves those white people that offend black people and those men who think women cannot think. She makes judgments on those people who believe "animals actually want to be used and abused by us and "those who never once have been considered animals' right."
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Hi, Walker gives humans qualities increasingly after blue's partner separated by his owner and her breath gets faster when she involves those white people that offend black people and those men who think women cannot think. This sentence is too long. I don't understand what you mean.
- Hi, Walker gives humans qualities increasingly after blue's partner separated by his owner and her breath gets faster when she involves those white people that offend black people and those men who think women cannot think.
- This sentence is too long.
- I don't understand what you mean.
- You need to say it another way, in shorter sentences.
- " have been considered is not correct.
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Hi,
Walker gives humans qualities increasingly after blue's partner separated by his owner and her breath gets faster when she involves those white people that offend black people and those men who think women cannot think. This sentence is too long. I don't understand what you mean. You need to say it another way, in shorter sentences.
Walker gives humans qualities increasingly after blue's partner separated by his owner and her breath gets faster when she involves those white people that offend black people and those men who think women cannot think. This sentence is too long. I don't understand what you mean. You need to say it another way, in shorter sentences.
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