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Osee Posted 18 years ago
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How to rephrase this sentence to make it reads concise and better?

The sentence is blued in the following.

After then, I would like to switch to biostatistics. The motivation comes from the recent loss of my mother to cancer, which has been making me think that it would be better to see myself spending my career primarily in cancer research using methods of biostatistics.

Thank you so much!
  

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Osee The sentence is blued in the following. After then, I would like to switch to biostatistics. The motivation comes from the recent loss of my mother to cancer, which has been making me think that it would be better to see myself spending my career primarily in cancer research using methods of biostatistics.

  • Osee The sentence is blued in the following.
  • After then, I would like to switch to biostatistics.
  • The motivation comes from the recent loss of my mother to cancer, which has been making me think that it would be better to see myself spending my career primarily in cancer research using methods of biostatistics.
  • Thank you so much!
  • It is a long sentence, but I think the structure is sound.
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OseeThe sentence is blued in the following.

After then, I would like to switch to biostatistics. The motivation comes from the recent loss of my mother to cancer, which has been making me think that it would be better to see myself spending my career primarily in cancer research using methods of biostatistics.

Thank yo
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I am an American school teacher with two degrees and 23 years of experience. This sentence is a classic example of a "run-on" sentence. I get tired before I get to the end of it (LOL). One hint is to break it up at the comma. Remember, you can get all of the information in with good grammar. Run-on sentences can be broken up into separate thoughts, which do not confuse the reader. This is h
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Hi,

I agree with you that shorter sentences are better, both here and often as a general rule.

However, in my experience, a 'run-on sentence' is usually defined as two or more sentences that are improperly joined according to the rules of grammar.

eg Tom bought a car it is red.

I haven't heard the term 'a run-on sentence' used simply to mean that a sentence is
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I envy you so much, because you have this wonderful gift of the English language. I have just joint this forum, because I needed an answer to a question I posted. “I can’t spell”.

I get so embarrassed when I go onto forums due to my grammar and spelling. No matter how many times I spell the same word, I cannot remember the correct way. I spell check all the time.

You would thi
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Hi,

how consumers buy

Do you want to use this as the title of an essay?

eg How Consumers Buy



Clive
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would a person be compelled to adopt the convictions and follow through with actions?
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Hi,

would a person be compelled to adopt the convictions and follow through with actions?

Would a person be compelled to adopt the convictions and follow through with actions?



I don't really understand the meaning here. How do you compel someone to adopt a conviction? That seems like a contradiction.



Clive

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