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James do Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
How to make this sentence short?
I have two sentence:
The effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the illuminance is analyzed first. The effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the received power will be deduced from the effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the illuminance.
Now, I want to make the second sentence short. How can I rewrite it. Something like:
-The effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the illuminance is analyzed first. The effect on the received power will be deduced from the one on the illuminance.
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-The effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the illuminance is analyzed first. From it, we will deduce the one on the illuminance.
Is the meaning of the secend sentence clear, or correct if I express in that way? Or can you suggest me other way to make my second sentence short without loss of its meaning.
The effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the illuminance is analyzed first. The effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the received power will be deduced from the effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the illuminance.
Now, I want to make the second sentence short. How can I rewrite it. Something like:
-The effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the illuminance is analyzed first. The effect on the received power will be deduced from the one on the illuminance.
or
-The effect of increasing LED zenith angle on the illuminance is analyzed first. From it, we will deduce the one on the illuminance.
Is the meaning of the secend sentence clear, or correct if I express in that way? Or can you suggest me other way to make my second sentence short without loss of its meaning.
Top answer
I think you need to change both sentences: The relationship between (increasing) the LED zenith angle and illuminance is determined first. From that relationship, the effect of increasing the LED zenith angle on the received power will be deduced.
- I think you need to change both sentences: The relationship between (increasing) the LED zenith angle and illuminance is determined first.
- From that relationship, the effect of increasing the LED zenith angle on the received power will be deduced.
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I think you need to change both sentences:
The relationship between (increasing) the LED zenith angle and illuminance is determined first. From that relationship, the effect of increasing the LED zenith angle on the received power will be deduced.
The relationship between (increasing) the LED zenith angle and illuminance is determined first. From that relationship, the effect of increasing the LED zenith angle on the received power will be deduced.
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