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Tsz Yin Chong Posted 13 years ago
Business & Finance

How to improve this sentence? "Replaced over 30% of equivalent workload of supervisor daily..."

Hi everyone, I was previously an intern with a securities firm, and is now trying to add this experience into my CV.

During my internship I did 30% of my supervisor's work and so reduced 30% of her workload.

I wrote in my CV, "Replaced over 30% of equivalent workload of supervisor daily in brokerage activities",

but I just feel that it doesn't sound right. How should I change it? (grammatically and in terms of style)

Thanks!!

Jacky
  

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Assumed over 30% of supervisor's daily workload during brokerage internship.

— Mister Micawber

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Assumed over 30% of supervisor's daily workload during brokerage internship.
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should I use assume or handle?

Thank you!
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Tsz Yin Chongshould I use assume or handle?
Are you having difficulty reading my revision?
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No, I really appreciate your help and agree with your revision. was just thinking could 'handle' be an alternative to 'assume'

sorry if it means any offence
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Tsz Yin Chongwas just thinking could 'handle' be an alternative
It is too casual for a CV.
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thank you. message well received
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