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Jewstin Posted 15 years ago
Grammar

How to fix this sentence?

All games –not just video games- that have an educational purpose have always been...

Specifically how do I integrate "not just video games" into this sentence without ruining the flow. This is for a school research article.

Thanks!
  

Top answer

To give you an accurate read on the flow of your research article, we'll need more than a sentence fragment. We may fix something in the first part of your sentence, for example, and spoil something in the last part that you haven't even showed us. And what have you said before this sentence that would make your reader think that you're talking only about video games?

— CalifJim

  • To give you an accurate read on the flow of your research article, we'll need more than a sentence fragment.
  • We may fix something in the first part of your sentence, for example, and spoil something in the last part that you haven't even showed us.
  • And what have you said before this sentence that would make your reader think that you're talking only about video games?
  • As an isolated fragment, I don't see any reason to add 'not just video games'.
  • All games is all games.
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To give you an accurate read on the flow of your research article, we'll need more than a sentence fragment. We may fix something in the first part of your sentence, for example, and spoil something in the last part that you haven't even showed us.

And what have you said before this sentence that would make your reader think that you're talking only about video games? As an isolated fr
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All games, not just video games, that have an educational purpose have always been a large promoter of interest throughout history.

To me, it feels kind of awkward.
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JewstinAll games, not just video games, that have an educational purpose have always been a large promoter of interest throughout history.
Have you tried my suggestion?

All games that have an educational purpose - not just video games - have always been a large promoter of interest throughout history.

Less awkward?

Or have you
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