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Freefunnyman Posted 19 years ago
Letter Writing

How to elaborate an Interview feedback!! Please help

Dear all kind freinds in here. Below is my answer to an employment agency after an interview call for a job offer with a third party (the client of the agency). I had been informed by The agency few days prior to the interview call. I would like to give the agency a feedback of the interview.
Would you please glance through the text below and Change/modify/delete as necessary in order to improve the text. I will apreciate any of your comments.

Thank you in advance!!
M.London

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Dear A,

As expected, I recieved a telephone call from XY Group (Mr. A & B) today afternoon. They reveiled their project in southern Angola, modification of AB project in YZ. I went through their website and had learnt about the project few days ago prior to thier call. Actually, the AB project started few years ago in 2003 and I already worked for one of the subconstructors in AB and I was in charge of planning of the piping fabrication and shipment part.

I have been asked about my career profile, whether I mind living in a camp, working in a specific conditions, my availability and what are my salary expectations. However, apart from my availability and salary expectations all questions were comfortably answered. For my availability, if everything is agreed, I will prepare a letter to suspend the course and it takes two to three weeks to get things ready ( Waiting on my driving licence in 2 weeks ). Regarding the salary expectations, I prefered to answer later knowing that matter should be discussed with you and not with your client.

Look forward to hearing from you soon and curious as how did evaluate the interview of today.

Yours cincerely,

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Top answer

Hi, Welcome to the Forum. I've suggested a lot of changes, so please read carefully to find them all. Best wishes, Clive Dear all kind freinds in here.

— Clive

  • Hi, Welcome to the Forum.
  • I've suggested a lot of changes, so please read carefully to find them all.
  • Best wishes, Clive Dear all kind freinds in here.
  • Below is my answer to an employment agency after an interview call for a job offer with a third party (the client of the agency).
  • I had been informed by The agency few days prior to the interview call.
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Hi,

Welcome to the Forum.

I've suggested a lot of changes, so please read carefully to find them all.

Best wishes, Clive

Dear all kind freinds in here. Below is my answer to an employment agency after an interview call for a job offer with a third party (the client of the agency). I had been informed by The agency few days prior to the inte
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Hi Clive,

Thank you for your help, I appreciated it a lot!

For the wrong word you mentioned "reveil": I would rather have said: Reveal

Is it possible to say: they revealed their project

Thanks again!!
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Hi,

What do you mean when you say 'They revealed their project'? Do you mean they told the world, the newpapers, the public, about it? If so, say 'They announced their project'.

Best wishes, Clive
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Hi Clive,

I say: they talked about the project in ... ( What would be suitable to say in order to say they informed me about the projet where I'll be working).

Thanks again...
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Hi,

They discussed / explained / mentioned / talked about / told me about . . .

Clive
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Thank you, it was very helpful!!
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