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Wepro Posted 16 years ago
Vocabulary

How to correct this sentence ?

"The team leader demanded from his team members a serious attitude towards work, good team spirit ,and that they work hard."

To correct this sentence , with what should we replace "that they work hard" ?
  

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You can just say "demanded ... hard work", but it seems an anti-climax at the end of the sentence. "

— Mr Wordy

  • You can just say "demanded ...
  • hard work", but it seems an anti-climax at the end of the sentence.
  • "
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You can just say "demanded ... hard work", but it seems an anti-climax at the end of the sentence. It may be better rearranged:

"The team leader demanded from his team members hard work, a serious attitude towards work and good team spirit."
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Though Mr. Wordy's sentence is more proper but if you don't want to rearrange and just want to replace that part, you can replace it with: "that they should work hard". According to context you can replace the word "should" with "must".
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Team leader demanded from his team members a serious attitude towards work, good team spirit and hard work.
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AnonymousThe team leader demanded from his team members a serious attitude towards work, good team spirit and hard work.
This is the version that I find anti-climactic. There's something about the sequence "a serious attitude towards work ... and hard work" that doesn't quite work for me stylistically.
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