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Dear GURU,
I am applying for a MSc programme in Health Management at a UK university and needed to write an outline on the following:
Your plan for future.
provide an outline of your ambitions and career plan. How do you intend to "make a difference" in you country? no more than 250 words
English in my second language. Here is my draft. Kindly comment. Thank you.

"I have a sense of social mission – I deeply care about the people I work with and serve. I am one of those who want to “do well by doing good”. It is my ambition to become a more effective researcher, medical practitioner and service leader – all to improve the health of our people, particularly children, and to strengthen our prevention abilities.

Having completed the Master’s programme in Health Management I will continue working at my X Medical School and Women Crisis Centre. I think it will be the perfect starting point to utilize the expertise obtained to become a leader in researching and developing interventions to improve health, particularly child health, at local, national and international settings. 

At the first stage X Medical School will enable me to share my experiences and applied knowledge with students and medical professionals. At Women Crisis Centre I am going to start with promoting the adoption of laws in domestic violence (there is no applicable laws to date in our region), launching new social projects and with that sustainable development. 

Since the range of factors that influences people’s health can seldom be addressed adequately by only one organization or program, a multidisciplinary approach to providing public health services has grown in importance. One of my main goals is to create a good partnership between private and public organizations, NGOs and institutions of health care.
In the long run, I envisage for myself a career positioned for a leadership role in health and social well-being promotion.