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OrcaDeen Posted 18 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

How long , and therefore challengable

0Hi once more02br
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00 This time, the sentence ,in my own words,is a Catestrophe02br
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00That is because it is so long and i donot want to split it since it gives a wonderful sense as long as it is02br
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00It reads :02br
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00"01b00unable to figure out what ought to be done with them, they became the council's object of perplexity. That is, if time is dedicated to investigate them all, none of the council's other tasks will be performed; if they are turned a blind eye, accusations of leaving the guilty unchained by failing to handle grievances justly will be made; and if no more than certain complaints are investigated, the council will be laid open to the charge of partiality."02b02br
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01b00I noticed that the length of the sentence itself express the perplexity of the council before the complaints and i want to keep it but i'm not sure if the strucure and the punctuation are correct05002b010id6
  

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0Hi,02br 02br 00To what degree are you willing to paraphrase and rearrange this? 02br 02br 00Clive0-

— Clive

  • 0Hi,02br 02br 00To what degree are you willing to paraphrase and rearrange this?
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0Hi,02br
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00To what degree are you willing to paraphrase and rearrange this? To what extent t do you want to make it sound like natural English?02br
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00Clive0-
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0Honestly I donot understand what you mean02br
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00But I wanted to know if my long English sentence can be accepted in English or not02br
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00I hope it be grammatically acceptable also0-
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00Yours is a poor reason for trying to keep the sentence long, Orca. More important is the trouble the reader will have understanding it. Try this:02br
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01i00Unable to 01b00decide 02b00what ought to be done with them01b00, the council were perplexed02b00.01b00 If 02b00time 01
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0Hi,02br
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01font00Honestly I donot understand what you mean02font02br
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00As you can see from Mr. M, a number of changes are desirable.02br
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00What I meant is that a translator has to decide how much they are willing to change the sentence, from the way the author wrote it in the original
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0Thank you so much for your contribution in this sentence and honestly I appreciate your effort in simplifying things this way02br
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00But i'd like to ask two questions in your correction please02br
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001- why did you chose "investigating" and not "investigate"?02br
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002-Checking Cambridge dictionary I found that " to lay sb o
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0Now i got what you intented to say02br
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00thanks alot for your constant help.And though freeing myself from the original text's chains is not an easy thing but i'll try to do it0-
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