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Dakial Posted 17 years ago
Letter Writing

How does this CV summary look to you


How is the english? I need some cruel critics, if it isn´t you it will be the HR people!
Here it is:

Business Manager with excellent business decisions analysis skills and a good balance between the analytic and qualitative analysis. Proven leadership, strong communication and creativity abilities; always presenting innovative solutions to face business challenges.
Experience in sales, products development and tactical marketing for the Airline & Travel Industry. Specifically experience in Airline Revenue Management & Pricing.
Thanks!
Daniel


  

Top answer

The main problem is your CV sounds like a job ad! May I suggest the use of personal pronouns? Chris

— Cbsteh

  • The main problem is your CV sounds like a job ad!
  • May I suggest the use of personal pronouns?
  • Chris
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The main problem is your CV sounds like a job ad! May I suggest the use of personal pronouns?

Chris
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Actually I didn't use personal pronouns because I wanted to save space. The two versions.

Business Manager with excellent business decisions analysis skills and a good balance between the analytic and qualitative analysis. Proven leadership, strong communication and creativity abilities; always presenting innovative solutions to face business challenges.
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Much better. Just a minor change:

I have a solid experience in sales, products development and tactical marketing for the Airline & Travel Industry, specifically in Airline Revenue Management & Pricing.

Chris
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Oh, yes, you're right, much better with a comma! Thanks for the help Chris!!
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