How does "neither ever... nor even ever..." sound?
I'm writing a song and I worry about whether it sounds weird.
"I would neither ever leave nor even ever say goodbye."
This is what I wrote. I wonder how it sounds to native speakers.
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"Neither/nor" sounds quite formal, and it would therefor be out of place in a ditty unless you wanted that effect at that point in the lyrics. Also, to leave and to say goodbye are the same thing, so it is nonsense, unless that's what you want there. That aside, the rhythm and sound of the line are quite good, and the grammar is unexceptionable.
- "Neither/nor" sounds quite formal, and it would therefor be out of place in a ditty unless you wanted that effect at that point in the lyrics.
- Also, to leave and to say goodbye are the same thing, so it is nonsense, unless that's what you want there.
- That aside, the rhythm and sound of the line are quite good, and the grammar is unexceptionable.
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"Neither/nor" sounds quite formal, and it would therefor be out of place in a ditty unless you wanted that effect at that point in the lyrics. Also, to leave and to say goodbye are the same thing, so it is nonsense, unless that's what you want there. That aside, the rhythm and sound of the line are quite good, and the grammar is unexceptionable.
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