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Beatrix Posted 20 years ago
How do you like my poem?
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Bare to soar mine lips to kisses
Touch me not to a fully tease
Moan a soul thou as wild as a beast
Thrust thine eye as deep as it is
For I have succumbed to thine very tips
Guide me not to a blury mist
Knowing thou have been burried inside mine hips
Peculiar moves dancing for its grace
Grasp the air and bless...
Thou made me amaze!
Linger to mine back when our eyes meet at a gaze
Knowing not a time we both have waste
Only the sweetness dew thou love to taste
Let our love lure reasoning the base
I let thee, thyself lead meneither to heaven nor hell
Blend our lust we know we'd love it well
Forbidden sin...
We both ignore the ding dong bell
Sweat and deep breath of a perfect combination thou would tell
Sigh I hear from thine lip when ram coz it's smell
Darlin, hold me tight and let mine lips sip every drop of this thick sweet caramel
June 14, 2006
Bare to soar mine lips to kisses
Touch me not to a fully tease
Moan a soul thou as wild as a beast
Thrust thine eye as deep as it is
For I have succumbed to thine very tips
Guide me not to a blury mist
Knowing thou have been burried inside mine hips
Peculiar moves dancing for its grace
Grasp the air and bless...
Thou made me amaze!
Linger to mine back when our eyes meet at a gaze
Knowing not a time we both have waste
Only the sweetness dew thou love to taste
Let our love lure reasoning the base
I let thee, thyself lead meneither to heaven nor hell
Blend our lust we know we'd love it well
Forbidden sin...
We both ignore the ding dong bell
Sweat and deep breath of a perfect combination thou would tell
Sigh I hear from thine lip when ram coz it's smell
Darlin, hold me tight and let mine lips sip every drop of this thick sweet caramel
June 14, 2006
Top answer
Rule 1: Don't publish in colours. It is a poem, not a painting, and you just distract from the words. This is a very interesting poem, and I think you have promise as a serious poet if you work hard at it.
- Rule 1: Don't publish in colours.
- It is a poem, not a painting, and you just distract from the words.
- This is a very interesting poem, and I think you have promise as a serious poet if you work hard at it.
- I would like to see you join us here in the 21st century by modernizing all the thou s and thine s-- those went out with Ben Jonson...
- and you have used some of them wrong anyway.
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Rule 1: Don't publish in colours. It is a poem, not a painting, and you just distract from the words.
This is a very interesting poem, and I think you have promise as a serious poet if you work hard at it. I would like to see you join us here in the 21st century by modernizing all the thous and thines-- those went out with Ben Jonson... and you have used some of them wrong
This is a very interesting poem, and I think you have promise as a serious poet if you work hard at it. I would like to see you join us here in the 21st century by modernizing all the thous and thines-- those went out with Ben Jonson... and you have used some of them wrong
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Thanks a lot for the critics and comment, I know I need to learn more about old English...too bad that the lesson is no longer exist in my university...maybe you could teach me then
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