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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
Letter Writing

How can I improve these sentences

I write for your urgent assistance to provide and upgrade the necessary authority to our Jackie, who has recently transferred from the Marketing Department to our Merchandising Department, to edit her personal profile and input the purchasing orders on our company's e-commerce system. Since the peak season for merchandising activities has just been underway, your instant provision of the required authortiy to Jackie on the system is highly appreciated. Thank you for your help.
  

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Anonymous How can I improve these sentences By shortening them. Try to eliminate unnecessary words and phrases, and then post your revision here.

  • Anonymous How can I improve these sentences By shortening them.
  • Try to eliminate unnecessary words and phrases, and then post your revision here.
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AnonymousHow can I improve these sentences
By shortening them. Try to eliminate unnecessary words and phrases, and then post your revision here.

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