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Be As Posted 12 years ago
Business & Finance

How can I improve or shorten this sentence?

This sentence is from the second paragraph in my customer service cover letter.

Finally, I promptly notified customers when their orders were ready for pick up, which helped to maintain customer loyalty with our store.
  

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Finally, I promptly notified customers of orders ready for pickup, helping assure customer loyalty to our business.

  • Finally, I promptly notified customers of orders ready for pickup, helping assure customer loyalty to our business.
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Finally, I promptly notified customers of orders ready for pickup, helping assure customer loyalty to our business.

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