How can I create a paragraph structure appropriately?

What I usually do while writing is just develop a topic sentence with one point and develop it further in the paragraph. However, today, I got two points for a paragraph. I listed what I did in the following list of steps.

1. Write the topic sentence - there are benefits of this trend
2. Introduce two main points - reducing stress and encouraging teamwork
3. Develop the first point further
4. Develop the second point further

To begin with, there are some benefits of this trend. In other words not only would allowing pupils to use several toys reduce their stress, but it could also encourage them in team activities. The predominant reason for this is that many children these days have to cope with kind of stress and toys could help them to wash away all of their negative thoughts. Furthermore, if a child has more than enough playing items, they might tend to share those with their friends, improving their social skills and collaboration.

I would be really grateful if someone could let me know whether this approach is acceptable and in line with the requirements of an academic essay,