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Who am I?
If I had to choose one those that is very important in my life it would be sports. Sports
has helped me get through a lot of problems in my life. When I feel depressed, I turn on the
television to watch one of my favorite sports teams play. It helps me feel better and takes my
mind off of the issue that was bothering me. Before I began watching sports, my siblings and I
argue frequently, but when we would watch a baseball game it brought us together as a family
and I really enjoyed that.
The most important person in my life is my best friend Lydia. Before I met Lydia, I was
an average student who loved to get in trouble and do bad stuff. She made me realized that
school was important and that I should try harder to do better in school. I took my Lydia's advice
and now take school very seriously. She also helps me when I feel sad or mad about something.
She calms me down and makes me realize that the problem that I was mad over is really nothing
to sad or angry about.
The one thing that happened in my life that changed me was when my mom moved to
California. Before my mom moved to California, If I needed something done she was the first
person I called. Now that she has moved, I have to do more things on my own now making me
more responsible and an adult. I think that it made me realize that I could not rely on my mother
to do everything for me, and that I would have to grow up and act as an adult.
An exciting moment in my life was for twenty- first birthday. I traveled to New York
City and went to Yankee's Stadium. For the first time in my life, I got to watch my favorite
professional baseball team play.
I have a passion for sports. Ever since I was young, I knew that I wanted to do go into a
career that had something to do with sports. When I was in the seventh grade, while watching
television, I saw a ESPN commercial, After I saw it I knew that was what I wanted to do for the
rest of the life. I have sacrificed a great deal for my future career: deciding to study for a test
instead of going to a party with my friends, studying for long periods of time, and going
volunteer at a radio station during the summer instead of traveling.
If I had to choose one those that is very important in my life it would be sports. Sports
has helped me get through a lot of problems in my life. When I feel depressed, I turn on the
television to watch one of my favorite sports teams play. It helps me feel better and takes my
mind off of the issue that was bothering me. Before I began watching sports, my siblings and I
argue frequently, but when we would watch a baseball game it brought us together as a family
and I really enjoyed that.
The most important person in my life is my best friend Lydia. Before I met Lydia, I was
an average student who loved to get in trouble and do bad stuff. She made me realized that
school was important and that I should try harder to do better in school. I took my Lydia's advice
and now take school very seriously. She also helps me when I feel sad or mad about something.
She calms me down and makes me realize that the problem that I was mad over is really nothing
to sad or angry about.
The one thing that happened in my life that changed me was when my mom moved to
California. Before my mom moved to California, If I needed something done she was the first
person I called. Now that she has moved, I have to do more things on my own now making me
more responsible and an adult. I think that it made me realize that I could not rely on my mother
to do everything for me, and that I would have to grow up and act as an adult.
An exciting moment in my life was for twenty- first birthday. I traveled to New York
City and went to Yankee's Stadium. For the first time in my life, I got to watch my favorite
professional baseball team play.
I have a passion for sports. Ever since I was young, I knew that I wanted to do go into a
career that had something to do with sports. When I was in the seventh grade, while watching
television, I saw a ESPN commercial, After I saw it I knew that was what I wanted to do for the
rest of the life. I have sacrificed a great deal for my future career: deciding to study for a test
instead of going to a party with my friends, studying for long periods of time, and going
volunteer at a radio station during the summer instead of traveling.
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I have underlined some problem areas and struck out unwanted words; it also needed reorganizing to get related sections together. Who am I? If I had to choose one those that is very important in my life it would be sports.
- I have underlined some problem areas and struck out unwanted words; it also needed reorganizing to get related sections together.
- Who am I?
- If I had to choose one those that is very important in my life it would be sports.
- Sports has helped me get through a lot of problems in my life.
- When I feel depressed, I turn on the television to watch one of my favorite sports teams play.
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I have underlined some problem areas and struck out unwanted words; it also needed reorganizing to get related sections together.
Who am I?
If I had to choose one those that is very important in my life it would be sports. Sports
has helped me get through a lot of problems in my life. When I feel depressed, I turn on the
television to w
Who am I?
If I had to choose one those that is very important in my life it would be sports. Sports
has helped me get through a lot of problems in my life. When I feel depressed, I turn on the
television to w
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