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Lucas21c Posted 17 years ago
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Hi. Would you help me?
Hi. Would you correct my article?
Thanks.
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Witnesses from the West Berlin reported later that they had heard at least ten shots and seen a man be transported. Chris Gueffroy died within minutes, his friend survived being severely wounded and then taken to a jail. Almost two days later, somebody told the Family that he was dead. Probably he might be dead not alive when he was shot in the military prohibited area. However, it was listed just as a unfortunate accident in the obituary - like a sample.
Chris Gueffroy was the last one killed in Wall, getting over the Berlin Wall. The East Germany broke down a half year later. The soldier who had fired at Chris Gueffroy was sentenced to 9 to 13 years in the Jail. The last politburo had to take responsibility for the order of the gunfire. Erich Honeckers, the successor of Egon Krenz, was sentenced to six and a half imprisonment.
Thanks.
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Witnesses from the West Berlin reported later that they had heard at least ten shots and seen a man be transported. Chris Gueffroy died within minutes, his friend survived being severely wounded and then taken to a jail. Almost two days later, somebody told the Family that he was dead. Probably he might be dead not alive when he was shot in the military prohibited area. However, it was listed just as a unfortunate accident in the obituary - like a sample.
Chris Gueffroy was the last one killed in Wall, getting over the Berlin Wall. The East Germany broke down a half year later. The soldier who had fired at Chris Gueffroy was sentenced to 9 to 13 years in the Jail. The last politburo had to take responsibility for the order of the gunfire. Erich Honeckers, the successor of Egon Krenz, was sentenced to six and a half imprisonment.
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"). Chris Gueffroy died within minutes ; his friend who survived was being severely wounded and then taken to a jail. Almost two days later, somebody told the f amily that he was dead.
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- Chris Gueffroy died within minutes ; his friend who survived was being severely wounded and then taken to a jail.
- Almost two days later, somebody told the f amily that he was dead.
- Probably he might have been be dead , not alive , when he was shot in the military prohibited area.
- However, it was listed just as a unfortunate accident in the obituary - like a sample (I don't understand the last part) .
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Lucas: I've made a few suggestions:
Witnesses from the West Berlin reported later that they had heard at least ten shots and seen a man carried out (be transported should be followed by "to..."). Chris Gueffroy died within minutes; his friend who survived wasbeing severely wounded and then taken to a jail. Almost two days later, somebody
Witnesses from the West Berlin reported later that they had heard at least ten shots and seen a man carried out (be transported should be followed by "to..."). Chris Gueffroy died within minutes; his friend who survived was
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