Hi! Would you be so kind to check my Motivation Letter? thanks!!!

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00I would like to apply for a master course. I have written the Motivation letter, and I would like to receive some help in checking it. It seems for me that my letter is a little bit small and not enough motivated. So would you be so kind to give your remarks?!02br
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00Dear Sir/ Madam, 02br
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00I would like to express my interest in Master programme XXX of YYYY Department, University,CITY,COUNTRY.02br
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00I have graduated with distinction from ZZZZ University, CITY, COUNTRY in 2006, Department XXXX. I followed the course of Information Science Applied to Economics. In my graduate courses I focused on process modelling, workflow modelling, technical and economic analysis, information management, computer-aided systems of management, information systems in accounting, investing, finance and credit organization, programming and some course in math. As a part of exchange program and I have a Bachelor degree from University, CITY, COUNTRY (2005) in a field of International Business and Management studies. 02br
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00My future plans are to work in academic area, thus I would like to conduct researches in the field of Information Systems and Operations Management and participate in international research groups. 02br
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00I have been involved in research activities since the first year of my graduate program. The problem of matching the quality criteria set by the customers and functionality of the software tools was one of the first that I have investigated. Then I examined the impact of internet on business matters. Being an exchange student I was interested in questions of e-learning and project-based learning. In 2005 I began to work in a field of workflow modeling and business process modeling. Further on, I developed the graduation project (2006-2005) that was held by research group of scientific supervisor Prof. Parfois and Engineering and Technological Centre, CITY. It dealt with business processes modelling and optimisation of manufacturing processes in a foundry production. 02br
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00Right now I want to enrol in the master's program Operations Management and Logistics in order to gain further knowledge and experience in a field of Logistics and Process Modelling. This master program appeals to me for it’s a good reputation for research training and multidisciplinary approaches.02br
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00From a master program abroad I am expecting a challenge in research and education and I hope to improve my in-depht knowledge, my language ability and just receive international background. Getting a new perspective on the research themes I am interesting in from European scientific school is one of my major intents. 02br
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00 I made a choice for COUNTRY and University as I used the facilities of University during my stay in CITY and I was astonished by the library facilities and access to educational materials, abilities to publish your results in scientific journals and to participate in conferences. I have learned that University is known for its high academic standards, the faculty's reputation for excellent teaching, challenging coursework and the excellent facilities are added attractions.02br
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00I am a motivated and ambitious person, and I like to accomplish tasks as thoroughly and effectively as possible. I have good presentation skills, that can be supported by grades for my bachelor and master graduation projects as well as reporting in conferences. I am wiling to adjust to a new culture and to overcome obstacles. I hope that I will have the opportunity to prove my abilities in the MSc program Operations Research and Logistics. 02br
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00I look forward to hearing from you in the near future regarding the success of my application. Should you require further information of any kind, please contact me.02br
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00Yours faithfully,02br
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00 Sagan0-